Many artists are well supported by their governments, but some feel that this is a misuse of taxpayers’ money. Although many artists couldn’t continue to work without this support, I feel that public health care is in more urgent need of the money.
On the one hand, it is difficult for many arts institutions to generate profit, so without some help from the government, many theatres and other such places may have to close. It is important that the government assists such institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. For example, there are many open-air concerts in the summer months in my hometown, which wouldn’t exist without the financial backing of the local council. However, I would argue that if these places were popular enough, they would be able to generate their own income.
On the other hand, public hospitals all over the world are under financial strain. It would seem obvious that people’s health is of more importance than people’s entertainment, so this money should be given to hospitals to upgrade equipment and shorten waiting lists. For instance, Downshire Hospital in Ireland has blamed the lack of public funding for their shortage of nurses and available beds. Therefore, I believe that the money given to artists should be redirected into the health care system.
In conclusion, although we may have fewer opportunities to enjoy the work of artists, I maintain that the money should be put into hospitals because people’s health is a more worthy cause.
Many
artists
are
well supported
by their
governments
,
but
some
feel that this is a misuse of taxpayers’
money
. Although
many
artists
couldn’t continue to work without this support, I feel that
public
health
care is in more urgent need of the money.
On the one hand, it is difficult for
many
arts institutions to generate profit,
so
without
some
help
from the
government
,
many
theatres
and other such places may
have to
close. It is
important
that the
government
assists such institutions
so
that they can continue to provide entertainment to the
public
.
For example
, there are
many
open-air concerts in the summer months in my hometown, which wouldn’t exist without the financial backing of the local council.
However
, I would argue that if these places were popular
enough
, they would be able to generate their
own
income.
On the other hand
,
public
hospitals
all over the world are under financial strain. It would seem obvious that
people
’s
health
is of more importance than
people
’s entertainment,
so
this
money
should be
given
to
hospitals
to upgrade equipment and shorten waiting lists.
For instance
,
Downshire
Hospital
in Ireland has blamed the lack of
public
funding for their shortage of nurses and available beds.
Therefore
, I believe that the
money
given
to
artists
should
be redirected
into the
health
care system.
In conclusion
, although we may have fewer opportunities to enjoy the work of
artists
, I maintain that the
money
should
be put
into
hospitals
because
people
’s
health
is a more worthy cause.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes