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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v.14

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 14
There is no good or bad news, there is just news to notify viewers around the world what is happening with in depth analysis. Some people believe that publishing bad news has become the new trend and others argue that it depends on the individual’s perspective. In my view, I feel that good news should be delivered to spread awareness. Firstly, there are many factors involved in deciding to broadcast and the most preponderant is its content and reason; however, prioritising the articles natural catastrophes like a viral outbreak needs immediate awareness and they stand tall in spreading. For example, the latest pandemic outbreak is Covid-19 is hitting the headlines ever since it started to spread its influence across globe. Needless to say, social security and educational bulletins will catch the editor’s eye to air related information. Secondly, another pivotal aspect is that commercial content also plays a key role. In addition, newspapers not only inform people about what’s happening, but also advertise, market products from big companies for profits. For instance, market experts report that based on the ratings and popularity news agents tend to associate in marketing latest goods. Hence, financial revenue also plays a significant role to make the media alive. In conclusion, we can clearly understand that information can be spread in a positive or negative manner, both financial and social awareness are the two main factors to hit the front page of the news headings. Finally, the role of news editors is too dire to ignore.
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news
, there is
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news
to notify viewers around the world what is happening with in depth analysis.
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Some
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people
believe that publishing
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bad
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news
has become the
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new
trend
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and others
argue that it depends on the individual’s perspective. In my view, I feel that
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good
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news
should
be delivered
to spread awareness.

Firstly
, there are
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many
factors involved in deciding to broadcast and the most preponderant is its content and reason;
however
,
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prioritising
the articles natural catastrophes like a viral outbreak needs immediate
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awareness and
they stand tall in spreading.
For example
, the latest pandemic outbreak is Covid-19 is hitting the headlines ever since it
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started
to spread its influence across globe. Needless to say, social security and educational bulletins will catch the editor’s eye to air related information.

Secondly
, another pivotal aspect is that commercial content
also
plays a key role.
In addition
, newspapers not
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only
inform
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people
about what’s happening,
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but
also
advertise, market products from
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big
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companies
for profits.
For instance
, market experts report that based on the ratings and popularity
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news
agents tend to associate in marketing
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latest
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goods
.
Hence
, financial revenue
also
plays a significant role to
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make
the media alive.

In conclusion
, we can
clearly
understand that information can
be spread
in a
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positive
or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
manner, both financial and social awareness are the two main factors to hit the front page of the
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news
headings.
Finally
, the role of
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news
editors is too dire to
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ignore
.
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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