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Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Parents are the best teacher. v.2

Parents are the best teacher. v. 2
Fathers and mothers are the first coach. I agree with the above-mentioned statement in some extent and I will develop my viewpoint as follows. The first reason I agree with it is that parents play an important role in their children’s learning, development, and upbringing. It is because the child sees his parents since he is born; in other words, parents set examples for their children. For instance, fathers and mothers not only teach their children how to speak, how to eat and drink, how to wear clothes but also earn human quality and how to become a good person. Also, parents want their children not to repeat the mistakes that they have done in their lives, and they know and observe their children’s behavior and character. Therefore, I think that parents are the best teacher rather than any school and any learning center. The other case I agree with it is that we see that generally, some orphans who could not get the attention of their parents don’t have any basis of ethical, moral and social values as compared to the ones who have been trained by their parents. It is due to the family stability and maturity of some parents. For example, some fathers and mothers drink and smoke next to the child, so it influences negatively for children because children are watching parents and learning from them. Some parents do not forbid something such as information, movie, advertisement and TV entertainment that negatively affects their children’s behavior and ethics. That is why children's upbringing and position in society depend on parents and family members. All in all, parents are the best teacher and teach every step of living this life.
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first
coach. I
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agree
with the above-mentioned statement in
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extent and I will develop my viewpoint as follows.

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first
reason I
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agree
with it is that
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parents
play an
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important
role in their
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children’s
learning, development, and upbringing. It is
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because
the child
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sees
his
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parents
since he
is born
;
in other words
,
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parents
set examples for their
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children
.
For instance
, fathers and mothers not
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only
teach their
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children
how to speak, how to eat and drink, how to wear clothes
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but
also
earn human quality and how to become a
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good
person.
Also
,
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parents
want their
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children
not to repeat the mistakes that they have done in their
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lives
, and they know and observe their
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children’s
behavior and character.
Therefore
, I
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think
that
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parents
are the best teacher
rather
than any school and any learning center.

The other case I
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agree
with it is that we
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that
generally
,
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some
orphans who could not
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get
the attention of their
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parents
don’t have any basis of ethical, moral and social values as compared to the ones who have
been trained
by their
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parents
. It is due to the family stability and maturity of
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some
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parents
.
For example
,
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some
fathers and mothers drink and smoke
next
to the child,
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so
it influences
negatively
for
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children
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because
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children
are watching
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parents
and learning from them.
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Some
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parents
do not forbid something such as information, movie, advertisement and TV entertainment that
negatively
affects their
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children’s
behavior and ethics.
That is
why children's upbringing and position in society depend on
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parents
and family members.

All in all,
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parents
are the best teacher and teach every step of living this life.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Parents are the best teacher. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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