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Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
We are an energy-hungry society. The global demand for power has always been on the rise since the world war. Given the limited availability of fossil fuels, people have been exploring for alternate forms of energy. Solar power has become the primary choice for the household as a green alternative for people in many countries. Let us look at a few possible reasons for this and discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of solar. First and foremost reason for blooming solar industry can be attributed to cheap installation cost and maintenance costs. Minimal raw materials are needed for setup. In many tropical countries, sunlight is available in abundance, so it basically boils down to effectively using this freely available source. Secondly, the many countries like India, Norway, China etc. Are incentivising green initiatives by reimbursing the installation costs in order to promote clean electricity. This also adds fuel to the fire. One of the most important advantages of using green energies like Solar, Wind etc. Is that they do not contribute to greenhouse gases. Fossil fuel based energy on the other hand is the primary cause for global warming as per UN report. However, there are a few drawbacks as well. Since solar power depends on the sunlight, numerous factors like season, region, cloud cover etc. Affect the energy production. There were instances where hurricanes had blown away solar-panels. To conclude, the solar power had become popular both due to cost, incentives, ease-of-use etc. Had outweighed the cons and became extremely popular. Despite the growth it had over the years, there is still a lot more to be done in terms of adoption in developing countries. If adopted, this can be a game changer in terms of solving energy requirements.
We are an energy-hungry society. The global demand for
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power
has always been on the rise since the world war.
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Given
the limited availability of fossil fuels,
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people
have been exploring for alternate forms of
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energy
.
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Solar
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power
has become the primary choice for the household as a green alternative for
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people
in
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many
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countries
.
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Let
us look at a few possible reasons for this and
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discuss about the
advantages and disadvantages of solar.

First
and foremost reason for blooming
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solar
industry can
be attributed
to
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cheap
installation
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cost
and maintenance
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costs
. Minimal raw materials
are needed
for setup. In
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many
tropical
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countries
, sunlight is available in abundance,
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so
it
basically
boils down to
effectively
using this
freely
available source.
Secondly
, the
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many
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countries
like India, Norway, China etc. Are
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incentivising
green initiatives by reimbursing the installation
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costs
in order to promote clean electricity. This
also
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adds
fuel to the fire.

One of the most
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important
advantages of using green
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energies
like
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Solar
, Wind etc. Is that they do not contribute to greenhouse gases. Fossil fuel based
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energy
on the other hand
is the primary cause for global warming as per UN report.
However
, there are a few drawbacks
as well
. Since
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solar
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power
depends on the sunlight, numerous factors like season, region, cloud cover etc. Affect the
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energy
production. There were instances where hurricanes had blown away solar-panels.

To conclude
, the
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solar
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power
had become popular both due to
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cost
, incentives,
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ease
-of-
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use
etc. Had outweighed the cons and became
extremely
popular. Despite the growth it had over the years, there is
still
a lot more to
be done
in terms of adoption in developing
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countries
. If adopted, this can be a game changer in terms of solving
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energy
requirements.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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