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Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
The development of e-technology is being increasingly witnessed these days. Some people perceive that the conventional printed media, such as newspaper and magazines will gradually disappear in the next few decades. In this essay, I shall discuss why I partly agree with this notion as I believe printed books and magazines will still play a crucial role in providing people information. There are numerous compelling reasons why traditional printed media’s popularity is decreasing because of technological advancements and the prominent one is that new technologies enable us to reduce the usage of paper which could generate positive impacts to the society as the public is becoming more aware of the benefits of eco-friendly technologies and significance of sustainable development. For instance, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that the usage of e-books are rapidly increasing in the public in recent years because it’s paperless and cost-friendly. As a result, the conventional printed media is becoming redundant due to technological innovations. However, I oppose this notion that the traditional media will be eventually replaced in the near future as people need to realize that the internet is not accessible for a large amount of people who live in the developing countries, so paper-based media will still remain the most important resource of information for a long time. Take myself for example, newspaper is the main way for my parents to know what is happening globally as they don’t know how to use electrical devices. Therefore, paper-based media will still be important for a long time in the society. To sum up, it is debatable if the conventional media will disappear in the near future. Taking everything into consideration, I agree that advancements in the technology have made traditional newspaper and books less important, but they will still be a significant part of people’s life.
The development of e-technology is being
increasingly
witnessed these days.
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Some
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people
perceive that the conventional
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printed
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media
, such as newspaper and magazines will
gradually
disappear in the
next
few decades. In this essay, I shall discuss why I partly
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agree
with this notion as I believe
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printed
books and magazines will
still
play a crucial role in providing
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people
information.

There are numerous compelling reasons why traditional
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printed
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media’s
popularity is decreasing
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because
of technological advancements and the prominent one is that new technologies enable us to
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reduce
the usage of paper which could generate
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positive
impacts to the society as the public is becoming more aware of the benefits of eco-friendly technologies and significance of sustainable development.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that the usage of e-books are
rapidly
increasing in the public in recent years
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because
it’s paperless and cost-friendly.
As a result
, the conventional
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printed
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media
is becoming redundant due to technological innovations.

However
, I oppose this notion that the traditional
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media
will be
eventually
replaced in the near future as
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people
need to realize that the internet is not accessible for a large amount of
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people
who
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live
in the
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developing countries
,
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so
paper-based
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media
will
still
remain the most
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important
resource of information for a long time. Take myself
for example
, newspaper is the main way for my parents to know what is happening globally as they don’t know how to
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use
electrical devices.
Therefore
, paper-based
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media
will
still
be
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important
for a long time in the society.

To sum up, it is debatable if the conventional
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media
will disappear in the near future. Taking everything into consideration, I
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agree
that advancements in the technology have made traditional newspaper and books less
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important
,
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but
they will
still
be a significant part of
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people’s
life.
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IELTS essay that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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