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Do you agree or disagree: people learn things from those in their own level than from those at a higher level v.1

: people learn things from those in their own level than from those at a higher level v. 1
When it comes to the learning, there are vast variety of effective factors that should be considered. The teacher or in other word, a person who teaches, also must have some critical characteristics to be accepted as a great one. Personally, I have always learned better from my classmates than my teachers. There are three main reasons to show why I have this preference. First and foremost, all too often, there are the same outlook for two classmates or co-workers to the problems which it is made them to have the same perception of matters. Therefore, they explanation for one solution would be more understandable for another one. I remember when I was studying in the university, I had a friend with I studied most of the time. Whenever I had any problem in the lesson which had been thought by the professor, I have asked her to explain it to me and her explanation would be more effective than the teachers' . Another prominent reason, it has been said that, if you want to be an excellent teacher, have to consider yourself at the same level that your students are. Actually, if you look the learners from above, the things that is thought, will not be comprehensible. For example, I have an intelligent bother who is very clever but he never could explain my math problems in an easy way which could be acceptable for me, because, he always looks at matters from his point of view but not mine. Last but not least, there are more trust between two friends or colleagues rather than between a person from lower level and higher authority and it leads to more impact on each other. For instance, if employees have some problems, they would prefer to ask their co-workers to explain about them but not their managers. Because they assume their colleagues in the same level and they know these questions would not affect the colleagues' perception of them. To sum up, some factors such as same outlooks to the problems, being under the same circumstances, and more trust will cause to learning better from those who are at their own peoples' level than those at the higher levels.
When it
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comes
to the learning, there are vast variety of effective factors that should
be considered
. The
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teacher
or in other word, a person who teaches,
also
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must
have
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some
critical characteristics to be
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accepted
as a great one.
Personally
, I have always learned better from my classmates than my
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teachers
. There are three main reasons to
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show
why I have this preference.

First
and foremost, all too
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often
, there are the same
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outlook
for two classmates or co-workers to the
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problems
which it
is made
them to have the same perception of matters.
Therefore
,
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they explanation
for one solution would be more understandable for another one. I remember when I was studying in the university, I had a friend with I studied most of the time. Whenever I had any
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problem
in the lesson which had been
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thought
by the professor, I have asked her to
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explain
it to me and her explanation would be more effective than the
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teachers&
#039;
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Another prominent reason, it has
been said
that, if you want to be an excellent
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teacher
,
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have to
consider yourself at the same
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level
that your students are. Actually, if you look the learners from above, the things
that is
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thought
, will not be comprehensible.
For example
, I have an intelligent bother who is
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very
clever
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but
he never could
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explain
my math
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problems
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in an easy way
which could be acceptable for me,
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because
, he always looks at matters from his point of view
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but
not mine.

Last
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not least, there are more trust between two friends or colleagues
rather
than between a person from lower
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level
and higher authority and it leads to more impact on each other.
For instance
, if employees have
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some
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problems
, they would prefer to ask their co-workers to
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explain
about them
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but
not their managers.
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Because
they assume their colleagues in the same
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level and
they know these questions would not affect the
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colleagues&
#039; perception of them.

To sum up,
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some
factors such as same outlooks to the
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problems
, being under the same circumstances, and more trust will cause to learning better from those who are at their
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own
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peoples&
#039;
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level
than those at the higher
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levels
.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay : people learn things from those in their own level than from those at a higher level v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
368 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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