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Do you agree or disagree on whether life is easy today when compared to our grandparents when they were kids? v.1

on whether life is easy today when compared to our grandparents when they were kids? v. 1
From the time we have grown up our country has advanced in many technologies which our grandparents never heard of. Today when we chat or visit them during holidays they narrate their life stories about how their life used to be when they were kids. Personally, I believe that life today is easier and more comfortable when compared to our grandparents. In my opinion, people are lazy because of these new inventions that we hear every day. There was a time when we were kids. Our grandparents used to think twice before purchasing toys for us because for them it purchasing toys was so costly. For instance, I went out with my grandparent to buy a toy for my kids and it was a cycle. The cycle is pricy today because of the new features that are added to it. There were features like tassels, musical horn, flashing light and the bike was named as a frozen and spiderman bike. The main use of the bike is nothing but driving but because of these advanced features today they are not less than 100$. My grandpa was shocked looking at the price because of the external features. He used to tell me that during his time there was no fancy stuff on a bike. Because during his time the main purpose of the bike was only driving to work and getting groceries. Secondly, today it is so easy to send a message from one end to another using the internet. During there time they used to send letters through the mail. For example, I remember that when I was a teen he used to write a letter using their hand on a paper and used to send it to me through a mail. I used to receive it after 10 days in my mailbox. So one day I told him that why don' t you send it through email. He laughed at me saying that emails can be deleted or sent in the trash but writing letters by hand will always be as a remembrance even when they are dead. The point he states here is that when we write a letter using hands the smell of the paper and the pen in which he had jotted down his thoughts can never be deleted and somewhere in future we will always remember the words that he has stated in the letter. In conclusion, I can say that its true life has become easy and comfortable when compared to the life of our grandparent but though we have the comforts in many ways we should utilize money in a right and proper way.
From the
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we have grown up our country has advanced in
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many
technologies which our
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grandparents
never heard of.
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Today
when we chat or visit them during holidays they narrate their
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life
stories about how their
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life
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used
to be when they were kids.
Personally
, I believe that
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life
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today
is easier and more comfortable when compared to our
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grandparents
. In my opinion,
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people
are lazy
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because
of these new inventions that we hear every day.

There was a
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time
when we were kids. Our
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grandparents
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used
to
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think
twice
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before
purchasing toys for us
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because
for them
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it purchasing
toys was
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so
costly.
For instance
, I went out with my
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grandparent
to
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buy
a toy for my kids and it was a cycle. The cycle is
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pricy
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today
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because
of the new features that are
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added
to it. There were features like tassels, musical horn, flashing light and the
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bike
was named
as a frozen and
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spiderman
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bike
. The main
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use
of the
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bike
is nothing
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but
driving
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but
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because
of these advanced features
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today
they are not less than
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100$
. My grandpa
was shocked
looking at the price
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because
of the external features. He
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used
to
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tell
me that during his
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time
there was no fancy stuff on a
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bike
.
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Because
during his
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time
the main purpose of the
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bike
was
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only
driving to work and getting groceries.

Secondly
,
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today
it is
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so
easy to
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send
a message from one
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end
to another using the internet. During there
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time
they
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used
to
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send
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letters
through the mail.
For example
, I remember that when I was a teen he
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used
to write a
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letter
using their hand on a paper and
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used
to
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send
it to me through a mail. I
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used
to receive it after 10 days in my mailbox.
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one day I
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told
him that why
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#039; t you
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send
it through email. He laughed at me saying that emails can
be deleted
or
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sent
in the trash
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but
writing
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letters
by hand will always be as a remembrance even when they are dead. The point he states here is that when we write a
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letter
using hands the smell of the paper and the pen in which he had jotted down his thoughts can never
be deleted
and somewhere in future we will always remember the words that he has stated in the letter.

In conclusion
, I can say that its true
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life
has become easy and comfortable when compared to the
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life
of our
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grandparent
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but
though we have the comforts in
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many
ways we should utilize money in a right and proper way.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay on whether life is easy today when compared to our grandparents when they were kids? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
441 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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