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Do you agree or disagree Childhood is the happiest time in a person s life Include reasons and examples to support your opinion v.1

Childhood is the happiest time in a person s life Include reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1
Nowadays, schools in various parts of the world are facing problems with student’s behaviour. There are several causes of this concerning trend, but measures could certainly be taken to tackle the problem. There are some reasons why students behave inappropriately. Firstly, changing living styles and further economic pressures affect the student’s behavioural pattern. For example, parents might spend more time at work than at home and as a result, they don’t have enough time to pay attention to their children and consequently lack of parental guidance and monitoring led to behavioural problems. Secondly, such behavioursmight be caused by external influences, like social media and television. For instance, students might be impressed violence that spread through these media. Therefore, they would show more aggressive behavior in educational institutions. In order to counter such problems, parents and teachers must devote enough time to the student and understand their strengths and weakness. Teachers should be friendly with student while still maintain their primary role as a trainer. By this way they might be able to understand the student’s point of views and as a result make better decisions through their education. Furthermore, it is also important to emphasize on physical activities like swimming, running and other sport, because help to channelize the energy of the students in a good manner. In conclusion, behaviour problems result from the way society works like changing living styles and external influence such as some TV programs. Nevertheless, by understanding the student’s views and guide their great energy to healthy exercises, students can gradually change and behave more appropriately.
Nowadays, schools in various parts of the world are facing
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behaviour
. There are several causes of this concerning trend,
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but
measures could
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some
reasons why
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students
behave
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.
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, changing living styles and
further
economic pressures affect the
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student’s
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behavioural
pattern.
For example
, parents might spend more time at work than at home and
as a result
, they don’t have
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enough
time to pay attention to their children and
consequently
lack of parental guidance and monitoring led to
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behavioural
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problems
.
Secondly
, such
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behavioursmight
be caused
by external influences, like social media and television.
For instance
,
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students
might
be impressed
violence that spread through these media.
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, they would
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show
more aggressive behavior in educational institutions.

In order to counter such
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problems
, parents and teachers
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must
devote
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enough
time to the
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student
and understand their strengths and weakness. Teachers should be friendly with
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student
while
still
maintain their primary role as a trainer. By this way they might be able to understand the
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student’s
point of views and
as a result
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make
better decisions through their education.
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, it is
also
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important
to emphasize on physical activities like swimming, running and other sport,
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because
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help
to channelize the energy of the
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students
in a
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good
manner.

In conclusion
,
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behaviour
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problems
result from the way society works like changing living styles and external influence such as
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some
TV programs.
Nevertheless
, by understanding the
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student’s
views and guide their great energy to healthy exercises,
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students
can
gradually
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change
and behave more
appropriately
.
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IELTS essay Childhood is the happiest time in a person s life Include reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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