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Do you agree or disagree? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase the teachers’ salaries. v.5

The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase the teachers’ salaries. v. 5
Nowadays, a great deal of people work from home due to quarantine, which negatively influenced the quality and benefits of working. In my opinion, it always affects negatively to the productivity of working. First of all, because of infection called COVID-19, all private companies, schools, shopping centres and education centres are cancelled almost in all countries. As a result, people started to work from home; teachers educate their pupils on-line, employees set up own home office which includes computer, quiet and convenient place. In my view, online education affects negatively to the effectiveness of acquisition and a number of teachers face challenges to use special programs oriented to conduct lessons, such as ZOOM, Skype and others alike. Moreover, a lot of pupils or workers become a lazy due to quarantine, as an outcome, sedentary lifestyle, which is very hazardous type of illness, is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. Nowadays, more office workers are addicted to their computers, laptops and smartphones, and, excessive sitting  on the computer leads to  visual impairment, I think. Obviously, during quarantine, people are afraid of buying things online despite well service. As a result of this, all online companies do not work or work for very low profit. To conclude, although there exist programs created for online teaching, the effectiveness and quality of acquisition is not as efficient as a real education system. Moreover, with working from home in mind, inactive lifestyle, which results in obesity, diabetes and other diseases alike, among pupils and workers is being started to be a popular these days, I believe.
Nowadays, a great deal of
people
work
from home due to quarantine, which
negatively
influenced the quality and benefits of working. In my opinion, it always affects
negatively
to the productivity of working.

First of all
,
because
of infection called COVID-19, all private
companies
, schools, shopping
centres
and education
centres
are cancelled
almost in all countries.
As a result
,
people
started
to
work
from home; teachers educate their pupils
on-line
, employees set up
own
home office which includes computer, quiet and convenient place. In my view,
online
education affects
negatively
to the effectiveness of acquisition and a number of teachers face challenges to
use
special programs oriented to conduct lessons, such as ZOOM, Skype
and others
alike.

Moreover
,
a lot of
pupils or workers become a lazy due to quarantine, as an outcome, sedentary lifestyle, which is
very
hazardous type of illness, is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. Nowadays, more office workers
are addicted
to their computers, laptops and smartphones, and, excessive sitting
 
on the computer leads to
 
visual impairment, I
think
.
Obviously
, during quarantine,
people
are afraid of buying things
online
despite well service.
As a result
of this, all
online
companies
do not
work
or
work
for
very
low profit.

To conclude
, although there exist programs created for
online
teaching, the effectiveness and quality of acquisition is not as efficient as a real education system.
Moreover
, with working from home in mind, inactive lifestyle, which results in obesity, diabetes and other diseases alike, among pupils and workers is being
started
to be a popular these days, I believe.
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IELTS essay The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase the teachers’ salaries. v. 5

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  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
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