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do you agree or disagree? parents today are more involved in their children’s' education than were parents in the past. v.42

parents today are more involved in their children’s' education than were parents in the past. v. 42
The number of people travelling for personal, professional and recreational purposes has increased more rapidly than in previous decades and this trend is successful due to technological advancements, thanks to the cheap air travel, and awareness among the people in different states and countries. The tourism industry is changing very fast and this is attracting a lot more travellers each year. This essay delves into the reasons behind increasing travellers and the benefits of travelling. To begin with, cheap air travel attracts a number of people to travel for personal and professional reasons. Moreover, People want to get refresh due to a heavy workload and stress at the workplace, so travelling helps them relax and rejuvenate their hectic schedules. Additionally, the internet has served a great purpose to aware people of tourist destinations and get any information about world-historical places anywhere and anytime. So, this has led to an increase in the number of people who opt for travelling as a holiday getaway. Secondly, tourism is taken seriously in several countries now. For instance, developed countries like France and Germany have travel & tourism as an integral part of their economy. For instance, Tourism contributes to around 25% of the national GDP for Germany. This has resulted in the exposure of different career opportunities in the realm of tourism, such as travel bloggers, tourist guides and trip organizers. Travelling activities bring a lot of benefits for the travellers themselves. For instance, travelling to different countries can help us to gain new cultures. For instance, many travellers have visited the Golden temple and they were mesmerized to see the unique history behind the temple and sentiments attached for the Sikh community to this holy place. Moreover, travelling helps us get away from a monotonous routine and revive us to concentrate on our work. In conclusion, It is true that travelling has increased rapidly in the past recent time, and people are travelling to different places for various reasons. Improved travel facilities, technological advancements are the main reasons more people are travelling more than ever before. Also, travelling offers numerous benefits that are impossible to attain staying at home.
The number of
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people
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travelling
for personal, professional and recreational purposes has increased more
rapidly
than in previous decades and this trend is successful due to technological advancements, thanks to the
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cheap
air
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travel
, and awareness among the
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people
in
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different
states and
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countries
. The
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tourism
industry is changing
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and this is attracting a lot more
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each year. This essay delves into the
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behind increasing
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travellers
and the benefits of travelling.

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air
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travel
attracts a number of
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people
to
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travel
for personal and professional
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reasons
.
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,
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want to
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refresh due to a heavy workload and
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stress
at the workplace,
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travelling
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helps
them relax and rejuvenate their hectic schedules.
Additionally
, the internet has served a great purpose to aware
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people
of tourist destinations and
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get
any information about world-historical places anywhere and anytime.
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So
, this has led to an increase in the number of
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people
who opt for
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travelling
as a holiday getaway.

Secondly
,
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tourism
is taken
seriously
in several
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countries
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, developed
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countries
like France and Germany have
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&
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tourism
as an integral part of their economy. For
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instance
,
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Tourism
contributes to around 25% of the national GDP for Germany. This has resulted in the exposure of
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different
career opportunities in the realm of
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tourism
, such as
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travel
bloggers, tourist guides and trip organizers.

Travelling activities bring
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a lot of
benefits for the
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travellers
themselves. For
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,
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to
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help
us to gain new cultures. For
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,
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travellers
have visited the Golden
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temple and
they
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the unique history behind the temple and sentiments attached for the Sikh community to this holy place.
Moreover
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travelling
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helps
us
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get
away from a monotonous routine and revive us to concentrate on our work.

In conclusion
, It is true that
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travelling
has increased
rapidly
in the past recent time, and
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people
are
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travelling
to
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different
places for various
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reasons
.
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travel
facilities, technological advancements are the main
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reasons
more
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people
are
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travelling
more than ever
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.
Also
,
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travelling
offers numerous benefits that are impossible to attain staying at home.
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IELTS essay parents today are more involved in their children’s' education than were parents in the past. v. 42

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
357 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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