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DO you agree or disagree? If a student is having difficulty studying a course, it is better for the student to turn to a friend who is good at this course than to turn to his teacher for help. v.161

If a student is having difficulty studying a course, it is better for the student to turn to a friend who is good at this course than to turn to his teacher for help. v. 161
The question is whether for a students who has some problems in a course, it should be better to consult with some his friends who are perfect in that mentioned course or he has to get help from his teacher. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this issue; however, I am inclined to declare that friends can be more effective in solving this trouble. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point: To begin with, it is doubtless that friends play a pivotal role in our life. As a matter a fact, the friendships are creates to provide some advantages for us. In fact, two persons in a relationship can rely on each other in any circumstance. One of the striking features of this relationship is that friends have to be able to affect each other in the most positive way. One should not forget that humans' main goal from entering to the society and connecting with other people is that they can form and modify their character by other human beings; hence, the friends assist us in this route. If one has accepted that his friend has a great ability in understanding a course which seems difficult for him, he can trust his friend. Since there is an empathy feeling between them, the conclusion of this collaboration, definitely would be promising. The second reason why I advocate this statement lies the fact that teachers do not have enough time to spend with their students. Their task has been defined in instructing the scientific matters in a general way for whole of the class. If teachers are supposed to guide students as individual, other problems will be appeared such as the lack of time for surveying students' assignments or discussing with other young about the class issues and also teachers are usually reluctant to dedicate their free time for students. Besides, one should notice that since there is an age gap among students and teachers; as a result, some students cannot feel comfortable to speak with his teacher privately; consequently, it can get worse the situation. Take my own experience, I remember when I was in high school, I could not perceive a section of math. I tried to get help from my teacher. After a lot of bagging, she accepted; however, since she was in a hurry, she explained that part for me in a short time without any example, then I lied her that I could understand the issue because I did not like to seem silly. After consulting with my friend, this problem removed totally; so with this example, the aforementioned question clearly illustrated. From my mentioned arguments, this conclusion could be drawn that friends usually have a close feeling and responsibility to each other, so they can be more helpful than teachers.
The question is whether for a
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problems in a course, it should be better to consult with
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who are perfect in that mentioned
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from his
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. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this issue;
however
, I
am inclined
to declare that
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can be more effective in solving this trouble. I feel this way for
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reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:

To
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begin
with, it is doubtless that
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friends
play a pivotal role in our life. As a matter a fact, the friendships are creates to provide
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some
advantages for us. In fact, two persons in a relationship can rely on each
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other
in any circumstance. One of the striking features of this relationship is that
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friends
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have to
be able to affect each
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other
in the most
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positive
way. One should not forget that
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humans&
#039; main goal from entering to the society and connecting with
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other
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people
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is
that they can form and modify their character by
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human beings;
hence
, the
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friends
assist us in this route. If one has
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accepted
that his
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friend
has a great ability in understanding a course which seems difficult for him, he can trust his
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friend
. Since there is an empathy feeling between them, the conclusion of this collaboration, definitely would be promising.

The second reason why I advocate this statement lies the fact that
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teachers
do not have
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enough
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time
to spend with their
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students
. Their task has
been defined
in instructing the scientific matters
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in a general way
for whole of the
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class
. If
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are supposed
to guide
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as individual,
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other
problems will
be appeared
such as the lack of
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time
for surveying
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students&
#039; assignments or discussing with
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other
young about the
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issues and
also
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teachers
are
usually
reluctant to dedicate their free
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time
for
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students
.
Besides
, one should notice that since there is an age gap among
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students
and
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;
as a result
,
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some
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students
cannot feel comfortable to speak with his
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privately
;
consequently
, it can
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get
worse the situation. Take my
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own
experience, I remember when I was in high school, I could not perceive a section of math. I tried to
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get
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help
from my
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teacher
. After
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a lot of
bagging, she
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accepted
;
however
, since she was in a hurry, she
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explained
that part for me in a short
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time
without any example, then I lied her that I could understand the issue
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because
I did not like to seem silly. After consulting with my
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friend
, this problem removed
totally
;
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so
with this example, the aforementioned question
clearly
illustrated.

From my mentioned arguments, this conclusion could
be drawn
that
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friends
usually
have a close feeling and responsibility to each
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other
,
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so
they can be more helpful than
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teachers
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay If a student is having difficulty studying a course, it is better for the student to turn to a friend who is good at this course than to turn to his teacher for help. v. 161

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
486 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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