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Do you agree or disagree? The way people dress is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v.142

The way people dress is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v. 142
Although many believe people dress is one of the good indicator of his personality or character, I on the other hand believe we cannot understand many things about people character or personality just by their dress. I will address the most discernible reasons in the following why I feel this way. To begin with, I believe judging people from their cloths is very superficial. People use different cloths for different task. Thus, the way they dress is not a good indicator to know his personality, we often can guess their works by their cloths not their characters. For instance, I when I bought my new appartment when I saw my neighbor I though he was not a good man, because he dressed casually and his cloths was always dirty. When I talked with my other neighbor about him he told me he is the best Mechanic in the town and he helped poor people. Accordingly I believe the way people dress is a superficial way to learn about people personality. Moreover, understanding people is a log term process, therefore people need a lot of time to learn others personality and character. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was student, one of my classmate always dressed expensive cloths. I though he must be nice guy and clever. After a while, we became close friends. After one year, I noticed he was very selfish and did not care others. It learned me if I wanted to know about people personality I should spend long time with them insted of just looking in how their dress. In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe the way people dress is not a good element of their personality because it is a superficail way, and because understanding others personality is a long term process.
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. I will address the most discernible reasons in the following why I feel this way.

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selfish and did not care others. It learned me if I wanted to know about
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IELTS essay The way people dress is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v. 142

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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