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Do you agre or disagree with the following statement? leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Do you agre or disagree with the following statement? leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Happiness cannot be measured in terms of wealth. I strongly agree with this statement and feel that there are many factors that can make a person happy other than money. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explore about my views regarding happiness. To begin with, happiness is an emotion and thus, is not quantifiable. The situations to be happy for differs from person to person as happiness is relative. Therefore, it becomes difficult to define happiness. For example, a rich individual won’t be concerned about a small amount of money, whereas a poor individual will be happy with that particular amount of money. Generally, people tend to feel joyful, is when they are satisfied, fulfilled or have achieved something. For instance, a student scoring grade ‘A’ in an exam would definitely feel delighted about his achievement. Moreover, happiness can be found in simpler things, as small as a walk with friends which can make some people cheerful, but sometimes even big achievements doesn’t make people happy, for example, an individual will not be happy even after receiving a promotion as he doesn’t enjoy the work he is doing. My experience of achieving happiness is setting a short attainable goal on a weekly basis and work toward achieving it. Further, one can also make long term goals along with the short one and work hard to achieve it. Accomplishing such goals can make me happy. Similarly, different factors can make people feel happy, since it is a subjective feeling. To conclude, as happiness is relative it is very difficult to predict, what and how things will make a person happy. However, specific aspect which can make them cheerful are the things and the situations they desire at that moment of time.
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cannot
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with this statement and
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that there are
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factors that can
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a
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other than money. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explore about my views regarding happiness.

To
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begin
with,
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happiness
is an emotion and
thus
, is not quantifiable. The situations to be
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happy
for differs from
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person
to
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person
as
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happiness
is relative.
Therefore
, it becomes difficult to define
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happiness
.
For example
, a rich individual won’t
be concerned
about a
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small
amount of money, whereas a poor individual will be
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happy
with that particular amount of money.
Generally
,
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people
tend to
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feel
joyful, is when they
are satisfied
, fulfilled or have achieved something.
For instance
, a student scoring grade ‘A’ in an exam would definitely
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feel
delighted about his achievement.

Moreover
,
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happiness
can
be found
in simpler things, as
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small
as a walk with friends which can
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people
cheerful,
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,
for example
, an individual will not be
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happy
even after receiving a promotion as he doesn’t enjoy the work he is doing. My experience of achieving
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happiness
is setting a short attainable goal on a weekly basis and work toward achieving it.
Further
, one can
also
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make
long term goals along with the short one and work
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hard
to achieve it. Accomplishing such goals can
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make
me
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happy
.
Similarly
,
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different
factors can
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make
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people
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happy
, since it is a subjective feeling.

To conclude
, as
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happiness
is relative it is
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difficult to predict, what and how things will
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a
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person
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happy
.
However
, specific aspect which can
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make
them cheerful are the things and the situations they desire at that moment of time.
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IELTS essay Do you agre or disagree with the following statement? leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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