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Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v.2

Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v. 2
Memories act as both a help and a hindrance to the success of someone. Many people advise you to learn from the past and apply those memories so that you can effectively succeed by avoiding repeating your past mistakes. On the other hand, people who get too caught up with the past are unable to move on to the future. Elie Wiesel’s memoir Night perfectly exemplifies the double nature of memories. Wiesel, a Jewish man, suffered heavily throughout the Holocaust and Night is rife with horrific descriptions of his experience. These memories help to spread the view of what life was like. Through recounting these memories, Wiesel is able to educate world readers about the atrocities committed in hopes that the same blatant violations of human rights are never repeated again. Through reliving the Holocaust through his writing, Wiesel was inspired to become proactive in the battle for civil rights. Some would point to his peaceful actions and the sales of his book and label him a success. Despite the importance of recounting such memories, Wiesel acknowledges the damage that memories can also cause. Following his liberation from the Auschwitz concentration camp, Wiesel was a bitter, jaded man. He could not even write Night until several years later. The end of the novel describes Wiesel’s gradual but absolute loss of faith throughout the experience. His past experiences haunted him for several years, rendering him passive. It was not until he set aside his past that he could even focus on the future. Had he remained so consumed with the pain and damage caused in the past, he may never have achieved the success that he has attained. Overall, Wiesel’s experiences exemplify the importance of the past as a guide. Wiesel’s past experiences helped to guide him in later life, but it was not until he pushed them aside that he could move on. To me this means that you should rely on your past without letting it control you. Allow your past to act as a guide, while making sure that you are also living in the present and looking to the future.
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act as both a
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help
and a hindrance to the success of someone.
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people
advise you to learn from the
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past
and apply those
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memories
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so
that you can
effectively
succeed by avoiding repeating your
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past
mistakes.
On the other hand
,
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people
who
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get
too caught up with the
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past
are unable to
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move
on to the future.

Elie Wiesel’s memoir Night
perfectly
exemplifies the double nature of
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memories
. Wiesel, a Jewish
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man
, suffered
heavily
throughout the Holocaust and Night is rife with horrific descriptions of his
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experience
. These
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memories
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help
to spread the view of what life was like. Through recounting these
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memories
, Wiesel is able to educate world readers about the atrocities committed in hopes that the same blatant violations of human rights are never
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repeated again
. Through reliving
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the


Holocaust through his writing, Wiesel
was inspired
to become proactive in the battle for civil rights.
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Some
would point to his peaceful actions and the sales of his book and label him a success.

Despite the importance of recounting such
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memories
, Wiesel acknowledges the damage that
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can
also
cause. Following his liberation from the Auschwitz concentration camp, Wiesel was a bitter, jaded
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man
. He could not even write Night until several years later. The
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of the novel
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describes
Wiesel’s gradual
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but
absolute loss of faith throughout the
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experience
. His
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past
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experiences
haunted him for several years, rendering him passive. It was not until he set aside his
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past
that he could even focus on the future. Had he remained
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so
consumed with the pain and damage caused in the
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past
, he may never have achieved the success that he has attained.
Overall
, Wiesel’s
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experiences
exemplify the importance of the
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past
as a guide. Wiesel’s
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past
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experiences
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helped
to guide him in later life,
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but
it was not until he pushed them aside that he could
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move
on. To me this means that you should rely on your
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past
without letting it control you.
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Allow
your
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past
to act as a guide, while making sure that you are
also
living in the present and looking to the future.
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IELTS essay Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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