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Do agree or disagree the extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. v.2

Do agree or disagree the extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. v. 2
Historic structures reflect the brilliant work done by our ancestral generations. It's an evidence of their existence and immense human architectural capacity. In the recent times, there have been debates around this where some people mention that the Government should collapse all the ancestral buildings and replace them with a modern city plan. This essay will discuss why the classic creations should be kept intact with the other modern buildings around the city and native towns. Though the beauty of the old creations is pleasing to the eye, some experts believe that getting these mansions down would help the city immensely. This is because, it disturbs the modern plan crafted for the towns. For example, if Delhi's historic places were rebuilt with a new city plan that would reduce the horrendous traffic in the place. Also, as there is a cost involved in the maintenance of these wonder towers, it is best to bulldoze these away. The maintenance of these wonders of the country would cost a bomb to maintain them with staff salaries, human personnel management, cleaning, etc. Though some people agree that keeping these structures would be helpful, the advantages of reserving these outweigh the argument. Age old buildings bring great richness to the places it was built. Many individuals protest against bringing such heritage down. Reason being that they add to the beauty of the city. I. e. There are many tourists seem to only be mesmerized by the world heritages built across the city. One such example is about people coming all over from different places of India to see the tall buildings of Mumbai’s Chhatrapati Shivaji Terminus Railway station, which is a UNESCO World Heritage site as compared to viewing the landscape of modern art that isn’t very appealing to everybody. Also, the brilliance in adoring our forefather’s creative skills is satisfying for the public to experience for generations ahead. Another example is that of the southern state temples in India, where each carving defines the artistic abilities of our creators. This is unbeatable in comparison to constructing contemporary buildings. As these monuments won’t be recreated again in the history of mankind, it is prudent to preserve them. To conclude, ancient infrastructure should be protected and maintained for the betterment of the future generations to learn and appreciate the elements of the glory that our ancestors left behind as a gift for us. This makes it clear that I strongly disagree to let government crash all the historic buildings to revamp it by constructing new generation towers.
Historic structures reflect the brilliant work done by our ancestral generations. It's an evidence of their existence and immense human architectural capacity. In the recent times, there have been debates around this where
some
people
mention that the
Government
should collapse all the ancestral
buildings
and replace them with a
modern
city plan. This essay will discuss why the classic creations should be
kept
intact with the other
modern
buildings
around the city and native towns.

Though the beauty of the
old
creations
is pleasing
to the eye,
some
experts believe that getting these mansions down would
help
the city
immensely
. This is
because
, it disturbs the
modern
plan crafted for the towns.
For example
, if Delhi's historic
places
were rebuilt with a new city plan that would
reduce
the horrendous traffic in the
place
.
Also
, as there is a cost involved in the maintenance of these wonder towers, it is best to bulldoze these away. The maintenance of these wonders of the country would cost a bomb to maintain them with staff salaries, human personnel management, cleaning, etc. Though
some
people
agree
that keeping these structures would be helpful, the advantages of reserving these outweigh the argument.

Age
old
buildings
bring great richness to the
places
it
was built
.
Many
individuals protest against bringing such heritage down. Reason being that they
add
to the beauty of the city.
I. e.
There are
many
tourists seem to
only
be mesmerized
by the world heritages built across the city. One such example is about
people
coming all over from
different
places
of India to
see
the tall
buildings
of Mumbai’s
Chhatrapati
Shivaji
Terminus Railway station, which is a
UNESCO World Heritage site
as compared to viewing the landscape of
modern
art that isn’t
very
appealing to everybody.
Also
, the brilliance in adoring our forefather’s creative
skills
is satisfying for the public to experience for generations ahead. Another example is that of the southern state temples in India, where each carving defines the artistic abilities of our creators. This is unbeatable
in comparison
to constructing contemporary
buildings
. As these monuments won’t
be recreated
again in the history of mankind, it is prudent to preserve them.

To conclude
, ancient infrastructure should
be protected
and maintained for the betterment of the future generations to learn and appreciate the elements of the glory that our ancestors
left
behind as a gift for us. This
makes
it
clear
that I
strongly
disagree to
let
government
crash all the historic
buildings
to revamp it by constructing new generation towers.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do agree or disagree the extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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