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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that ben v.12

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that ben v. 12
It is often said that pictures speak louder than words. I suppose this maxim goes well with the way news stories are presented by newspapers and television channels. Some people say that it is better to use more pictures. I agree with this viewpoint. A pictorial and graphical depiction of news stories can be very appealing and convincing. It can also cheer up the mood of the readers. For example, a candid image of a rejoicing sports team after winning a world cup trophy. For example, a candid image of a rejoicing sports team after winning a world cup trophy will warm many hearts. Sometimes, it may just take a single picture to narrate a sordid tale or describe the enormity of the situation. For instance, a front page image of a crying child in a flood affected surrounding speaks volumes. To cite another example, the picture of the grieving family of a martyred solider can have quite an impact on the reader / the nation. Furthermore, news with photos arouses the reader’s interest to a large extent. In my favourite newspaper ‘Bombay Times’, pictures of various celebrities compel me to read the articles about them. Depending on our interest area, a related image can draw our attention to read the entire article. In summary, I believe pictures in the newspapers and TV channels can create a lasting impression on our mind with their positive, powerful or heart-rending message. They also make the news stories more interesting and easy to comprehend.
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pictures
speak louder than words. I suppose this maxim goes well with the way
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news
stories
are presented
by newspapers and television channels.
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Some
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people
say that it is better to
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use
more
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pictures
. I
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agree
with this viewpoint.

A pictorial and graphical depiction of
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news
stories can be
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very
appealing and convincing. It can
also
cheer up the mood of the readers.
For example
, a candid
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image
of a rejoicing sports team after winning a world cup trophy.
For example
, a candid
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image
of a rejoicing sports team after winning a world cup trophy will warm
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many
hearts.
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Sometimes
, it may
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just
take a single
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picture
to narrate a sordid tale or
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describe
the enormity of the situation.
For instance
, a front page
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image
of a crying child in a flood
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affected
surrounding speaks volumes. To cite another example, the
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picture
of the grieving family of a martyred solider can have quite an impact on the reader / the nation.

Furthermore
,
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news
with photos arouses the reader’s interest to a large extent. In my
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favourite
newspaper ‘Bombay Times’,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pictures
of various celebrities compel me to read the articles about them. Depending on our interest area, a related
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image
can draw our attention to read the entire article.

In summary, I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pictures
in the newspapers and TV channels can create a lasting impression on our mind with their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
, powerful or heart-rending message. They
also
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make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
stories more interesting and easy to comprehend.
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IELTS essay A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that ben v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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