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Disruptive school children have negative influence on others. students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view v.1

Disruptive school children have negative influence on others. students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. with this view v. 1
Pupils who are disobedient should be taught separately in a group because they tend to have a poor impact on others. While this approach can be proved beneficial up to some extent, this is far from being the best method to solve this issue. Through the medium of this essay, I will shed some light on the feasible solutions that could be implemented by many organisations. To begin with, it is crucial that a class of students should contain all kinds of brains because this brings a natural competitive aura in the learning environment which helps children to improve their knowledge. Also, a child can learn Do's and Don'ts of life more in a diverse culture of class than in an environment where all students acquire similar persona. Additionally, a child's brain is more active when it is working in an area surrounding by multifarious other brains that work differently, which can help in the child's overall development and tend to increase the ability of problem solving. Putting noisy children in a separate class may be helpful initially, but in a long term, it has many negative impacts in the improvement of children overall performance. Firstly, they carry their childhood behaviour to their adulthood because of the mindset they attain in a class full of naughty children, which could lead to major burn-outs in their personal and professional life. Secondly, their chances of being successful in the future will be minimal as they had lack of opportunities while in school. In conclusion, however is sounds effective to put noisy students in a separate group and taught apart from other children, it has some serious long term impact that cannot be turned back.
Pupils who are disobedient should
be taught
separately
in a group
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they tend to have a poor impact on others. While this approach can
be proved
beneficial up to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, this is far from being the best method to solve this issue. Through the medium of this essay, I will shed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
light on the feasible solutions that could
be implemented
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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organisations
.

To
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begin
with, it is crucial that a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
of students should contain all kinds of brains
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because
this brings a natural competitive aura in the learning environment which
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helps
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children
to
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improve
their knowledge.
Also
, a child can learn
Did you mean the idiom "Dos and Don'ts"?
Do's and Don'ts
of life more in a diverse culture of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
than in an environment where all students acquire similar persona.
Additionally
, a child's brain is more active when it is working in an area surrounding by multifarious other brains that work
differently
, which can
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help
in the child's
overall
development and tend to increase the ability of problem solving.

Putting noisy
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children
in a separate
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class
may be helpful
initially
,
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but
in a long term, it has
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many
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negative
impacts in the improvement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
overall
performance.
Firstly
, they carry their childhood
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
to their adulthood
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the mindset they attain in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
full of naughty
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, which could lead to major burn-outs in their personal and professional life.
Secondly
, their chances of being successful in the future will be minimal as they had lack of opportunities while in school.

In conclusion
,
however
is sounds effective to put noisy students in a separate group and taught apart from other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
serious long term impact that cannot
be turned
back.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Disruptive school children have negative influence on others. students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. with this view v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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