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Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.1

Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. v. 1
Drug Abuse has become a topic of serious concern in recent times. The reason for widespread usage of drugs is mainly recreation and more autonomy and it can have harmful effects on health and relationships. In this essay we will discuss these aspects and try to provide reasonable solutions to this problem. Two main reasons for the growing misuse of chemical substances can be stated. First and foremost, most of these drugs are used for recreational purposes. They are common among youngsters at parties and gathering because they seek pleasure and enjoyment through them. For example, a substance called ‘ecstasy’ is known to cause an elevated mood. Secondly, people have become more independent, and with no one to look out for them, they are prone to be tempted towards drug addiction. Over time, repeated use of recreational drugs can have serious consequences. Firstly, it can have detrimental effects on health, ranging from minor changes in sensation to lethal outcomes like death. For instance, meth is known to cause death by stopping the heart from functioning. Moreover, drug addicts are known to become inconsiderate towards their relations, and this leads to a breakdown in their families and social life because of the negative impact it has on the people around them. To address this issue, the general public should be educated and informed about the harms of such a practice. Safe usage of medication should be emphasized. In addition, rehabilitation centres should be established for people fighting addiction so that they can obtain proper guidance and help in tackling this situation. In conclusion, increasing trend of recreational usage of drugs and lack of surveillance contributes towards the menace of addiction and it can lead to serious health issues and can destroy relationships. Authorities can tackle this situation by mass education and creation of rehabilitation facilities for the affected people.
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Drug
Abuse has become a topic of serious concern in recent times. The reason for widespread usage of
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drugs
is
mainly
recreation and more autonomy and it can have harmful effects on health and relationships. In this essay we will discuss these aspects and try to provide reasonable solutions to this problem.

Two main reasons for the growing misuse of chemical substances can
be stated
.
First
and foremost, most of these
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drugs
are
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used
for recreational purposes. They are common among youngsters at parties and gathering
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because
they seek pleasure and enjoyment through them.
For example
, a substance called ‘ecstasy’
is known
to cause an elevated mood.
Secondly
,
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people
have become more independent, and with no one to look out for them, they are prone to
be tempted
towards
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drug
addiction.

Over time, repeated
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use
of recreational
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drugs
can have serious consequences.
Firstly
, it can have detrimental effects on health, ranging from minor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in sensation to lethal outcomes like death.
For instance
, meth
is known
to cause death by stopping the heart from functioning.
Moreover
,
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drug
addicts
are known
to become inconsiderate towards their relations, and this leads to a breakdown in their families and social life
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because
of the
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negative
impact it has on the
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people
around them.

To address this issue, the
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general public
should
be educated
and informed about the harms of such a practice. Safe usage of medication should
be emphasized
.
In addition
, rehabilitation
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centres
should
be established
for
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people
fighting addiction
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so
that they can obtain proper guidance and
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help
in tackling this situation.

In conclusion
, increasing trend of recreational usage of
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drugs
and lack of surveillance contributes towards the menace of addiction and it can lead to serious health issues and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
relationships. Authorities can tackle this situation by mass education and creation of rehabilitation facilities for the
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affected
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people
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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