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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country v.1

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country v. 1
Nowadays, people travel to various abroad countries, in order to, get worthwhile opportunities like jobs, great living environments and facilities in a society. Once they find a job, according to their need, they usually consider working there, and in most of the cases, they get settled in a new country. Although they have to live in a new strange place which could be so far away from their family, they get to have an experience of the new people and their cultures. In continuing education, living in a completely new world gives a great exposure, especially if a country is so developed and the people there are so supportive for diverse culture in their country. The Probability of getting high salary has always been maximized in a developed country. If someone gets a considerable amount of wages, it becomes easier for him to look after his family in a proper way, he can fulfil all he and his family need in a better way. For example, if someone in your family is so ill that he got caught by a severe disease, which requires a diligent treatment, which can only be done in a hospital, which is so expensive. However, the fact that you earn well you can get this treatment done quickly without worrying about the money. So, this is one of the most relevant reason to work in those countries. Second, if we look at the other side of it, we have to adapt the culture and living habits of their country. Sometimes what happens, we are so accustomed to the climate of our local country that it becomes so hard to make ourselves adjust in a foreign country. For example, if I am from country like India, where weather is mostly warm, it will be difficult for me to make myself comfortable in a cold country like England. Also, sometimes you get so busy in doing your work in abroad that it becomes so tough for you to come back to your country, to meet your family. Also, by living in a foreign country which is already a developed country, we make more rise in their economy and their other developments instead of our own native country. In conclusion, there are both merits and demerits in both scenarios, so it all depends on the situation or condition a person might be in. If someone is from a poor background and he gets this opportunity to work in a foreign country, then it is a prudent decision to go there. But if someone is already getting enough amount of money in his country, then he should consider working in his native country, to assist more development in his country.
Nowadays,
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people
travel to various abroad
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countries
, in order to,
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get
worthwhile opportunities like jobs, great
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living
environments and facilities in a society. Once they find a job, according to their need, they
usually
consider working there, and in most of the cases, they
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get
settled in a
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new
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country
. Although they
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have to
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live
in a
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new
strange place which could be
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far away from their
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family
, they
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get
to have an experience of the
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new
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people
and their cultures.

In continuing education,
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living
in a completely
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new
world gives a great exposure,
especially
if a
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country
is
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so
developed and the
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people
there are
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so
supportive for diverse culture in their
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country
. The Probability of getting high salary has always
been maximized
in a developed
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country
. If
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someone
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gets
a considerable amount of wages, it becomes easier for him to look after his
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family
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in a proper way
, he can fulfil all he and his
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family
need in a better way.
For example
, if
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someone
in your
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family
is
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ill that he
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got
caught by a severe disease, which requires a diligent treatment, which can
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only
be done
in a hospital, which is
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so
expensive.
However
, the fact that you earn well you can
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get
this treatment done
quickly
without worrying about the money.
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So
, this is one of the most relevant
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reason
to work in those countries.

Second, if we look at the other side of it, we
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have to
adapt the culture and
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habits of their
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.
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what happens, we are
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so
accustomed to the climate of our local
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country
that it becomes
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so
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hard
to
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ourselves adjust in a foreign
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country
.
For example
, if I am from
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country
like India, where weather is
mostly
warm, it will be difficult for me to
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make
myself comfortable in a
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cold
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country
like England.
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,
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sometimes
you
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busy in doing your work in abroad that it becomes
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tough for you to
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back to your
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, to
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meet
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living
in a foreign
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country
which is already a developed
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, we
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make
more rise in their economy and their other developments
instead
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own
native country.

In conclusion
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so
it all depends on the situation or condition a person might be in. If
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someone
is from a poor
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background and
he
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gets
this opportunity to work in a foreign
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country
, then it is a prudent decision to go there.
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But
if
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someone
is already getting
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enough
amount of money in his
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country
, then he should consider working in his native
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country
, to assist more development in his
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country
.
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IELTS essay Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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