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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or working a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or working a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1
These days, learning a new language has many benefits including gathering knowledge of different countries, more job opportunities, better communication skills and so on. While some people believe that there is only one reason for learning a foreign language is to visit or work in a foreign country, other people think that the advantages of learning other languages are not limited to the job or travel. On one hand, people desire to learn another language is able to communicate with people who speak this language. Hence, a large number of people learn some languages such as English, Chinese, Japanese, French, Spanish, German either to visit or find jobs in the countries where people use these languages. In addition, although travelling is temporary, the basic conversation is needed such as ordering food, asking for direction, going to market and so on. Also, the local people will be more friendly with travelers who can speak their language. On the other hand, learning new languages gives people two important advantages. Firstly, knowing a different language is the same as a person can discover a new country, understand the cultures of this nation. Besides, people also find out more new things such as foods, books, movies and so on by reading or watching. Secondly, leaning languages help people improve memory. When people study foreign vocabulary, it is a good way to practise the human brain. This also helps people are confident to communicate with foreigners. In conclusion, this might be true that people learn new language for finding job or travelling in overseas. In my view, it gives many benefits for people like understanding about new cultures and improving better skills. Therefore, it would be better if people spend little time learning a new language.
These days,
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benefits including gathering knowledge of
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different
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countries
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job
opportunities, better communication
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skills
and
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on. While
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some
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people
believe that there is
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only
one reason for
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learning
a foreign
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language
is to visit or work in a foreign
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country
, other
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people
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think
that the advantages of
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learning
other
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languages
are not limited to the
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job
or travel.

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people
desire to learn another
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language
is able to communicate with
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people
who speak this
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language
.
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people
learn
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some
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languages
such as English, Chinese, Japanese, French, Spanish, German either to visit or find
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jobs
in the
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countries
where
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people
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languages
.
In addition
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is needed
such as ordering food, asking for direction, going to market and
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so
on.
Also
, the local
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people
will be more friendly with travelers who can speak their language.

On the other hand
,
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learning
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new
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languages
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important
advantages.
Firstly
, knowing a
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different
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language
is the same as a person can discover a
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new
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country
, understand the cultures of this nation.
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,
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people
also
find out more
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new
things such as foods, books, movies and
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so
on by reading or watching.
Secondly
, leaning
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languages
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help
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people
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memory. When
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people
study foreign vocabulary, it is a
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the human brain. This
also
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helps
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people
are confident to communicate with foreigners.

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people
learn
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language
for finding
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job
or travelling in overseas. In my view, it gives
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many
benefits for
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people
like understanding about
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new
cultures and improving better
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skills
.
Therefore
, it would be better if
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people
spend
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little
time
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learning
a
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new
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language
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or working a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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