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Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some people believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views v.4

Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some people believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. 4
Being a famous doesn't solely come with advantages. There are many drawbacks of being celebrity that one may wish that one is famous at all. I totally support the idea that being famous leads more problems than benefits, and I will detail it in this essay. Firstly, when you become a famous person, you are easy to be recognized in any places, so your privacy is not respected anymore. You even may not have a relaxing night out with your friends without being disturbed. Anyone is likely to recognize you and start pointing you or want an autograph from you while you try to relax after long and tiring day. You may get annoyed when only thing what you ask is to have a calming leisure time with your friends. Secondly, you have no chance to make a small mistake like every ordinary person can do. For example, if you do something wrong, it is highly likely that it will be spoken publicly and criticised by many who are hosted news programmes or magazine programmes if it is learned by others. One from a newspaper may write a column about your small mistake and over-criticise it as if this person never made a small mistake like yours. It can be really annoying to be criticised by the ones who are also likely to do same small mistakes. Overall, being famous comes with big drawbacks which are needed to deal with, even if it offers some advantages which ordinary people don't have.
Being a
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doesn't
solely
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come
with advantages. There are
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many
drawbacks of being celebrity that one may wish that one is
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famous
at all. I
totally
support the
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idea
that being
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famous
leads more problems than benefits, and I will detail it in this essay.

Firstly
, when you become a
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famous
person, you are easy to
be recognized
in any places,
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so
your privacy is not respected anymore. You even may not have a relaxing night out with your friends without
being disturbed
. Anyone is likely to recognize you and
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start
pointing you or want an autograph from you while you try to relax after long and tiring day. You may
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get
annoyed when
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only
thing what you ask is to have a calming leisure time with your friends.

Secondly
, you have no chance to
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make
a
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small
mistake like every ordinary person can do.
For example
, if you do something
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wrong
, it is
highly
likely that it will
be spoken
publicly
and
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criticised
by
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many
who
are hosted
news
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programmes
or magazine
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programmes
if it
is learned
by others. One from a newspaper may write a column about your
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small
mistake and
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over-criticise
it as if this person never made a
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small
mistake like yours. It can be
really
annoying to be
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criticised
by the ones who are
also
likely to do same
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small
mistakes.

Overall
, being
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famous
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comes
with
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big
drawbacks which
are needed
to deal with, even if it offers
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some
advantages which ordinary
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people
don't have.
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IELTS essay Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some people believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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