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TPO 43 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain two different ways in which animals protect themselves with food. v.1

TPO 43 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain two different ways in which animals protect themselves with food. v. 1
Different drugs have been widespread among young generations. This essay will discuss some reason behind this phenomenon and some influences of this trend. There are two reasons triggering more and more teenagers to use drugs. Firstly, young people are easily influenced either directly or indirectly by the environment. If their parents, friends or even idols are addicted to drugs, they are more likely to imitate their behaviours. Secondly, many people use drugs to stabilize their mood. Post trauma, emotional issues or untreated psychological problems often drive people to turn to drugs. Psychotropic drugs can boost people’s mood and increase the sense of euphoria, albeit temporarily. In a long term, people find themselves using these drugs again and again. This trend brings some detrimental ramifications on drug users’ health and the society as a whole. To begin with, psychotropic drugs will cause damage drug their brains’ activities. Those people who use psychotropic drugs for a long time are more likely to suffer hallucination, and a more serious consequence is that they lose abilities to do some basic activities, such as showering and shopping. As a result, the government has to look after these people. In addition, drug abuse spreads a wrong notion to the public. People may think they can relieve their pressure directly by having drugs rather than find practical measures. Therefore, people tend to lose problem-solving ability. In conclusion, several factors can cause drug abuse and it also exerts some adverse effects on drug users’ health and the society, including negatively impacting their health and increasing the burden for the government.
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have been widespread among young generations. This essay will discuss
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reason behind this phenomenon and
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influences of this trend.

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teenagers
to
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use
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drugs
.
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, young
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people
are
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by the environment. If their parents, friends or even idols
are addicted
to
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drugs
, they are more likely to imitate their
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behaviours
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Secondly
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people
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use
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to stabilize their mood. Post trauma, emotional issues or untreated psychological problems
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often
drive
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people
to turn to
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. Psychotropic
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drugs
can boost
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people’s
mood and increase the sense of euphoria, albeit
temporarily
. In a long term,
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people
find themselves using these
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again and again.

This trend brings
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detrimental ramifications on
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users’ health and the society as a whole. To
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begin
with, psychotropic
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drugs
will cause damage
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drug
their brains’ activities. Those
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people
who
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use
psychotropic
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drugs
for a long time are more likely to suffer hallucination, and a more serious consequence is that they lose abilities to do
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some
basic activities, such as showering and shopping.
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, the
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government
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has to
look after these
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people
.
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,
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abuse spreads a
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wrong
notion to the public.
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may
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think
they can relieve their pressure
directly
by having
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drugs
rather
than find practical measures.
Therefore
,
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people
tend to lose problem-solving ability.

In conclusion
, several factors can cause
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drug
abuse and it
also
exerts
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some
adverse effects on
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users’ health and the society, including
negatively
impacting their health and increasing the burden for the
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government
.
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IELTS essay TPO 43 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain two different ways in which animals protect themselves with food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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