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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming v.3

Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming v. 3
In this new era of civilisation with the advancements in science and technology, an increasing number of environmental issues, especially global warming, are generated by improved nations. However, creating an awareness campaign and conservation of the forests are the main ways of reducing the dangers of the warming of the earth. To begin with, the most practical solution to reduce global warming dangers is to create a government-sponsored awareness campaign. An effective awareness campaign could warn people of the dangers of the warming of the earth, particularly a rising sea level, which could lead to heavy rainfall, and therefore, resulting in a huge loss of properties and, sadly, lives. Hopefully, this would raise awareness amongst the public. For instance, the U. K. recently encouraged their citizens to always drop their waste materials, particularly plastics bottles and bags, which are mostly the cause of land pollution, into bags for recycling companies to pick them up. This has resulted in an improved environment in the country. Another strategy is that forest conversation ought to be made a priority. In other words, there must consistently be a control on the cutting of trees in the forests, for trees absorbed millions of tonnes of carbon dioxide. Carbon dioxide is one of the major factors that cause climate change, and it is mostly emitted from the burning of fossil fuels from power plants and the burning of gasoline for transportation, mainly from cars. If plants are preserved or constantly planted, there would be a drastic reduction of global warming due to the large amounts of carbon dioxide that would be absorbed by them. In conclusion, it is evidently clear that although there are several environmental issues that developed countries could create, the creation of awareness campaigns by the government as well as the preservation of the forests are the potential ways to minimise the dangers of the global problem.
In this new era of
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civilisation
with the advancements in science and technology, an increasing number of environmental issues,
especially
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global
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warming
,
are generated
by
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improved
nations.
However
, creating an
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awareness
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campaign
and conservation of the
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forests
are the main ways of reducing the
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dangers
of the
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warming
of the earth.

To
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begin
with, the most practical solution to
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reduce
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global
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warming
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dangers
is to create a
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government
-sponsored
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awareness
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campaign
. An effective
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awareness
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campaign
could warn
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people
of the
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dangers
of the
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warming
of the earth,
particularly
a rising sea level, which could lead to heavy rainfall, and
therefore
, resulting in a huge loss of properties and,
sadly
,
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lives
.
Hopefully
, this would raise
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awareness
amongst the public.
For instance
, the U. K. recently encouraged their citizens to always drop their waste materials,
particularly
plastics bottles and bags, which are
mostly
the cause of land pollution, into bags for recycling
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to pick them up. This has resulted in an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
environment in the country.

Another strategy is that
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forest
conversation ought to
be made
a priority.
In other words
, there
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must
consistently
be a control on the cutting of trees in the
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forests
, for trees absorbed millions of tonnes of carbon dioxide. Carbon dioxide is one of the major factors that cause climate
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change
, and it is
mostly
emitted from the burning of fossil fuels from power plants and the burning of gasoline for transportation,
mainly
from cars. If plants
are preserved
or
constantly
planted, there would be a drastic reduction of
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global
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warming
due to the large amounts of carbon dioxide that would
be absorbed
by them.

In conclusion
, it is
evidently
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clear
that although there are several environmental issues that
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developed countries
could create, the creation of
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awareness
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campaigns
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
as well
as the preservation of the
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forests
are the potential ways to
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minimise
the
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dangers
of the
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global
problem.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6
Overall Band Score
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