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Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their lifestyle Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v.1

Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their lifestyle Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v. 1
Even after knowing all the impacts of environmental degradation, people still continue to pollute the environment with their activities. This essay will discuss why people are not adapting environmental friendly lifestyle and the ways to motivate people in order to preserve our environment. In my view, there are two reasons why people are not concerned about their activities towards the environment. First of all, people prefer to live in a convenient way. That is to mean, they choose to adapt a lifestyle which is easy and effortless even if the activity may cause negative consequences. For example, we commute using vehicles such as car rather than a bicycle because cars are faster and requires less effort. Secondly, rise in the living standard of people have also forced them to ignore the environmental resources. People are earning enough money with the rise in employment opportunities around the globe. So, this situation has resulted in people fulfilling their luxuries like buying large houses and cars and neglect the environmental concerns this would cause. However, some measures can be implemented so as to preserve the environment. Policies can be introduced against people’s increasing demands in order to minimize the effects of them. If people are prevented to continue their luxurious life by the government rules, this will ultimately reduce the impacts of human activities towards the environment. For instance, car ownership can be limited to only one per family so that the all family members will share it and the effects of cars could be minimized. Similarly, awareness should be raised among all nations and their citizens. Although scientists are raising environmental concerns to the public, a lot of people are unaware of it. If awareness programs are launched by a nation, this will make people more aware of their environmental situations. In conclusion, there are clear reasons why people are found not changing their lifestyle and there are obvious measures which should be adapted to save our environment.
Even after knowing all the impacts of
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environmental
degradation,
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people
still
continue to pollute the
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environment
with their
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activities
. This essay will discuss why
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people
are not adapting
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environmental
friendly lifestyle and the ways to motivate
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people
in order to preserve our environment.

In my view, there are two reasons why
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people
are not concerned about their
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activities
towards the
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environment
.
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First of all
,
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people
prefer to
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live
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in a convenient way
.
That is
to mean, they choose to adapt a lifestyle which is easy and effortless even if the
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activity
may cause
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negative
consequences.
For example
, we commute using vehicles such as
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car
rather
than a bicycle
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because
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cars
are faster and requires less effort.
Secondly
, rise in the living standard of
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people
have
also
forced them to
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ignore
the
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environmental
resources.
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People
are earning
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enough
money with the rise in employment opportunities around the globe.
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So
, this situation has resulted in
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people
fulfilling their luxuries like buying large
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houses
and
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cars
and neglect the
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environmental
concerns this would cause.

However
,
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some
measures can
be implemented
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so as to
preserve the
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environment
. Policies can
be introduced
against
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people’s
increasing demands in order to minimize the effects of them. If
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people
are
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prevented
to continue their luxurious life by the
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government
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rules
, this will
ultimately
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reduce
the impacts of human
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activities
towards the
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environment
.
For instance
,
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car
ownership can
be limited
to
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only
one per family
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so
that the all family members will share it and the effects of
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cars
could
be minimized
.
Similarly
, awareness should
be raised
among all nations and their citizens. Although scientists are raising
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environmental
concerns to the public,
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a lot of
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people
are unaware of it. If awareness programs
are launched
by a nation, this will
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make
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people
more aware of their
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environmental
situations.

In conclusion
, there are
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clear
reasons why
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people
are found
not changing their lifestyle and there are obvious measures which should
be adapted
to save our
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environment
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their lifestyle Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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