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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stress in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stress in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time. v. 2
It is irrefutable that most of the people are living a stressful life due to various reasons. Owing to it, some psychologists suggest that we should not be involved in any activity for a course of time to ameliorate the situation. However, I believe that doing something constructive and spending quality time with your loved one would be a better option than to sit ideal and do nothing. Whenever a person gets overwhelmed by their commitments, he should definitely take a break, but not to site ideal. Conversely, they can make some efforts to curb the existing issues. For instance, if someone is overburdened by their official work, they should mediate to improve their concentration and enhance their cognitive thought process, and can also make plans to change strategies of working to improve their time management. On the contrary, if a person chooses to do nothing at this golden time, he would lose great opportunities for personal and career development. Furthermore, if a person is struggling due to his personal commitments, they should surely give their spare time to their family and children to improve family relationships, rather than not making any efforts during their free time. For example, if a couple is unable to spend quality time together due to various reasons, they should take beak from everything, and can plan a long holiday together. This would be a far better idea to reduce stress in relationships than simply take free time alone and do nothing in it. In conclusion, I firmly disagree with the idea suggested by few experts that one should do nothing for some amount of time to reduce stress in their lives. I think that one should take a break from monotonous life and try to put effort to cope with the prevailing issues.
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people
are living a stressful life due to various reasons. Owing to it,
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some
psychologists suggest that we should not
be involved
in any activity for a course of
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time
to ameliorate the situation.
However
, I believe that doing something constructive and spending quality
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time
with your
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loved
one would be a better option than to sit ideal and do nothing.

Whenever a person
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gets
overwhelmed by their commitments, he should definitely take a break,
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but
not to site ideal.
Conversely
, they can
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make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
efforts to curb the existing issues.
For instance
, if someone
is overburdened
by their official work, they should mediate to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their concentration and enhance their cognitive
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thought
process, and can
also
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make
plans to
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change
strategies of working to
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improve
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
management.
On the contrary
, if a person chooses to do nothing at this golden
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, he would lose great opportunities for personal and career development.

Furthermore
, if a person is struggling due to his personal commitments, they should
surely
give their spare
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time
to their family and children to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
family relationships,
rather
than not making any efforts during their free
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time
.
For example
, if a couple is unable to spend quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
together due to various reasons, they should take beak from everything, and can plan a long holiday together. This would be a far better
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idea
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
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stress
in relationships than
simply
take free
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time
alone and do nothing in it.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
disagree with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
suggested by few experts that one should do nothing for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
amount of
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time
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
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stress
in their
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lives
. I
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think
that one should take a break from monotonous life and try to put effort to cope with the prevailing issues.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stress in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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