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Describe your faorite TV perogramme you enjoyed wathing when you were a child. you should say: * what it was about* how often you wathed it* why you enjoyed itand you should also say whether people in your country regularly watch television v.1

Describe your faorite TV perogramme you enjoyed wathing when you were a child. you should say: * what it was about* how often you wathed it* why you enjoyed itand you should also say whether people in your country regularly watch television v. 1
It is usually complained by many companies that their staff now seem to lack of soft-skills at the workplace such as teamwork, communication, cooperative skills. In my view, I think there have reasons causing to this, including the background education of each worker or the personality. These also effect company's productivity. Thus, I might suggest some solutions to solve these above causes. The first main reason seems to be from the academic status of each worker. In fact, many local universities and institutes nowadays are focusing on educating more theoretical knowledge than the practical skills to their student resulting in making them paper-workers instead of active workers. However, companies can help employee build up their soft skills by offering free social courses, for example, team-building or funding charity for poor people. Hence, this can help to encourage workers to be more confident and make the connection between everyone stronger. The further reason may come from their personalities, for instance, there are two kinds of people, one is introvert and the other is extrovert which containing two different temperaments, especially the introvert. To solve the problem of helping introvert people connect with others, I suggest organizations should arrange more informal meetings, offer physical classes such as yoga training course. Japanese cooperation, for instance, the Aeon-Group, had realized the vital role of connecting people, so they encourage their worker doing mediation every morning. The result is workers become more friendly and increase the productivity as well. In conclusion, I think the lack of interpersonal skills is the common problem of every working group because of the employee's quality. However, this can be solved by offering staff's company opportunities to learn to connect with the others.
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usually
complained by
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many
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companies
that their staff
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now
seem to lack of soft-
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skills
at the workplace such as teamwork, communication, cooperative
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skills
. In my view, I
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think
there have reasons causing to this, including the background education of each
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worker
or the personality. These
also
effect
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company
's productivity.
Thus
, I might suggest
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some
solutions to solve these above causes.

The
first
main reason seems to be from the academic status of each
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worker
. In fact,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
local universities and institutes nowadays are focusing on educating more theoretical knowledge than the practical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
to their student resulting in making them paper-workers
instead
of active
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workers
.
However
,
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companies
can
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help
employee build up their soft
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skills
by offering free social courses,
for example
, team-building or funding charity for poor
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people
.
Hence
, this can
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help
to encourage
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workers
to be more confident and
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make
the
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connection between
everyone stronger.

The
further
reason may
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come
from their personalities,
for instance
, there are two kinds of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, one is introvert and the other is extrovert which containing two
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different
temperaments,
especially
the introvert. To solve the problem of helping introvert
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
connect with others, I suggest organizations should arrange more informal meetings, offer physical classes such as yoga training course. Japanese cooperation,
for instance
, the
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Aeon-Group
, had realized the vital role of connecting
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people
,
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so
they encourage their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
worker
doing mediation every morning. The result is
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workers
become more friendly and increase the productivity
as well
.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the lack of interpersonal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
is the common problem of every working group
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because
of the employee's quality.
However
, this can
be solved
by offering staff's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
opportunities to learn to connect with the others.
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IELTS essay Describe your faorite TV perogramme you enjoyed wathing when you were a child. you should say: * what it was about* how often you wathed it* why you enjoyed itand you should also say whether people in your country regularly watch television v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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