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Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is usedin modern society. Include details and examples. v.1

Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is usedin modern society. Include details and examples. v. 1
Uniforms in schools are widely accepted throughout the world. It creates a uniformity, as the name suggests, in between the students, which will help them to focus on their studies. Moreover, school is a place mixed with students from different financial background where uniforms can reduce social-economic headaches. However, there are many who believe that uniforms are unacceptable, which offend a student’s right to wear their likely dresses. In my opinion, uniforms are good and which have only positive effect. In this essay, we can discuss the pros and cons of this and I will try to prove my views with some points. Firstly, a dress code enforces discipline towards learning by changing a person’s attitude towards success. School authorities should focus its priority for teaching and learning rather than trend competitions. Learning is easier to focus when everyone is dressed alike. Secondly, students from middle-class or lower-class can’t compete with the dress collection of the upper-class students. This can lead to an inferiority complex, shattered confidence, and so on, which in-turn can reduce the attendance rate or can create a dispute/bullying in between colleagues and can reduce the strong bonding between the friends. Furthermore, a student’s attendance also improves with the relief of picking out a new outfit every morning. In addition, without the pressure of competing with different styles, students are more relaxed in school. There is no doubt that uniform has substantial impacts on children. On the other side, most children need 3-5 different school uniforms in order make it through the week. Because kids will be kids, you can expect to be replacing at least one pair of pants that were torn at the knees during the year, as well as an ink-splattered uniform shirt or two. Additional shoes may also be required, which is another added cost. This means an added expense that some families may feel is completely unnecessary and unaffordable. Many have the opinion that, it is difficult to express your individuality through fashion, when you are forced to wear the same thing as everyone else is wearing to school every day. To draw the conclusion, I would like to say that uniform is an essential part of schooling and should not be neglected at any cost. It gives them the impression that they belong to the same family and this makes them thrive in their academics as well as in extracurricular activities. Moreover, banning uniform is not a healthy activity and could leave bad effects on children's attitudes.
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accepted
throughout the world. It creates a uniformity, as the name suggests, in between the
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students
, which will
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help
them to focus on their studies.
Moreover
,
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school
is a place mixed with
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students
from
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different
financial background where
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uniforms
can
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reduce
social-economic headaches.
However
, there are
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many
who believe that
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uniforms
are unacceptable, which offend a
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student’s
right to wear their likely dresses. In my opinion,
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uniforms
are
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good
and which have
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only
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positive
effect. In this essay, we can discuss the pros and cons of this and I will try to prove my views with
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some
points.

Firstly
, a dress code enforces discipline towards learning by changing a person’s attitude towards success.
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School
authorities should focus its priority for teaching and learning
rather
than trend competitions. Learning is easier to focus when everyone
is dressed
alike.
Secondly
,
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students
from middle-
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class
or lower-
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class
can’t compete with the dress collection of the upper-
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class
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students
. This can lead to an inferiority complex, shattered confidence, and
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so
on, which in-turn can
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reduce
the attendance rate or can create a dispute/bullying in between colleagues and can
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reduce
the strong bonding between the friends.
Furthermore
, a
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student’s
attendance
also
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improves
with the relief of picking out a new outfit every morning.
In addition
, without the pressure of competing with
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different
styles,
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students
are more relaxed in
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school
. There is no doubt that
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uniform
has substantial impacts on children.

On the other side, most children need 3-5
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different
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school
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uniforms
in order
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make
it through the week.
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Because
kids will be kids, you can
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expect
to be replacing at least one pair of pants that
were torn
at the knees during the year,
as well
as an ink-splattered
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uniform
shirt or two. Additional shoes may
also
be required
, which is another
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added
cost. This means an
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added
expense that
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some
families may feel is completely unnecessary and unaffordable.
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Many
have the opinion that, it is difficult to express your individuality through fashion, when you
are forced
to wear the same thing as everyone else is wearing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
every day.

To draw the conclusion, I would like to say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
is an essential part of schooling and should not
be neglected
at any cost. It gives them the impression that they belong to the same family and this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them thrive in their academics
as well
as in extracurricular activities.
Moreover
, banning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
is not a healthy activity and could
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leave
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effects on children's attitudes.
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IELTS essay Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is usedin modern society. Include details and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
416 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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