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1. Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is used in modern society. Include details and examples. v.1

1. Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is used in modern society. Include details and examples. v. 1
Nowadays, some people believe that movies and series are available on electronic devices such as mobiles and laptops. However, others think movies are best enjoyed in the cinema only. In my opinion, I prefer watching movies at home on my devices rather than going in movie theatres. In this essay, I shall discuss both of the aspects. On one hand, watching movies at home is comparatively cheaper. To watch movie on big screen, a ticket is needed and it should be booked beforehand, but to see films at home it is not required. For instance, once I tried to book a ticket, but the show was sold out and it was very disheartening. Furthermore, It is more flexible at home and requires less effort and time. On the other hand, watching movies at theatre has a whole new experience and it enhances features of movie. It has a bigger screen and better sound system which provides an overall impressive experience. For instance, movies like marvel avengers when seen on the silver screen have a very deep impact. Also, it is known for a fact that latest movies can only be seen in cinema. To conclude, money can be saved if people watch movies at personal space, but people will definitely miss the big screen experience. Not every movie is available at home so, it limits the options. However, staying home is more comfortable and people can have privacy in their homes. From my viewpoint, watching movies is more fun and has less complications at home.
Nowadays,
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some
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people
believe that
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movies
and series are available on electronic devices such as mobiles and laptops.
However
, others
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think
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movies
are best enjoyed in the cinema
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only
. In my opinion, I prefer watching
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movies
at home on my devices
rather
than going in
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movie
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theatres
. In this essay, I shall discuss both of the aspects.

On one hand, watching
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movies
at home is
comparatively
cheaper. To
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watch
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movie
on
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big
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screen
, a ticket
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and it should
be booked
beforehand,
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but
to
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see
films at home it is not required.
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, once I tried to book a ticket,
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but
the
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show
was sold
out and it was
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very
disheartening.
Furthermore
, It is more flexible at home and requires less effort and time.

On the other hand
, watching
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movies
at
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theatre
has a whole new experience and it enhances features of
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movie
. It has a bigger
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screen
and better sound system which provides an
overall
impressive experience.
For instance
,
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movies
like marvel avengers when
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seen
on the silver
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screen
have a
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very
deep impact.
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, it
is known
for a fact that latest
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movies
can
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only
be
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seen
in cinema.

To conclude
, money can
be saved
if
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people
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watch
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movies
at personal space,
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but
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people
will definitely miss the
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big
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screen
experience. Not every
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movie
is available at home
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so
, it limits the options.
However
, staying home is more comfortable and
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people
can have privacy in their
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homes
. From my viewpoint, watching
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movies
is more fun and has
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less
complications at home.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. Describe your country’s national anthem or national flag. Explain how it is used in modern society. Include details and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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