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describe ideal marriage partner. what are the qualities do you think are important for husband or wife? v.1

describe ideal marriage partner. what are the qualities do you think are important for husband or wife? v. 1
Full-time students pay much attention on their study. Some individuals believe it is very necessary for them to take part in other activities. I completely agree with this opinion. It is true that in the process of studying in the university, college students should try their best to improve their professional skills and acquire a wide range of professional knowledge through continuous learning. Because this is the most useful method for them to increase their employability and enhance their competitiveness in the future job. However, in my opinion, the importance of participating in various other activities cannot be ignored. This is mainly because of college students who is going to enter the society, it is essential for them to possess all kinds of abilities such as cooperation ability, communication ability or organization's ability which are the basic qualities that must be possessed in the future career. If an employee with strong professional skill is not good at expressing his own ideas and even afraid of communicating with others, then his real ability is hard to be found and he is also difficult to integrate into the group. So in the preparation before entering the society, students should actively take part in various activities to enhance their abilities in all aspects. Besides, joining some other activities is also conducive to the improvement of learning efficiency. If a student spends almost all of her time on learning, it will be hard for her to find the fun of learning and trigger her negative emotion, which will greatly reduce their learning efficiency. Therefore, at this time, they should join some other activities to help them relieve the boredom of learning and change the mood. For example, through participating in sports games can relax their body and relieve pressure from studying, or taking part in some social activities motivate them to know some friends with same hobby or pursuit so that they can exchange some experiences in learning and encourage each other. Thus, go through appropriate relaxation, they can readjust their mentality and find the motivation and energy for learning, which is very helpful for the improvement of learning efficiency. In conclusion, I fully support the view that college students should pay much attention to other activities rather than just focusing on learning their own professional knowledge.
Full-time
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pay much attention on their study.
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individuals believe it is
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very
necessary for them to
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take part
in
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other
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activities
. I completely
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agree
with this opinion.

It is true that in the process of studying in the university, college
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students
should try their best to
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improve
their
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professional
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skills
and acquire a wide range of
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professional
knowledge through continuous
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learning
.
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Because
this is the most useful method for them to increase their employability and enhance their competitiveness in the future job.

However
, in my opinion, the importance of participating in various
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other
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activities
cannot be
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ignored
. This is
mainly
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because
of college
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students
who is going to enter the society, it is essential for them to possess all kinds of
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abilities
such as cooperation
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ability
, communication
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ability
or organization's
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ability
which are the basic qualities that
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must
be possessed
in the future career. If an employee with strong
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professional
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skill
is not
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good
at expressing his
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own
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ideas
and even afraid of communicating with others, then his real
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ability
is
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hard
to be
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found and
he is
also
difficult to integrate into the group.
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So
in the preparation
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before
entering the society,
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students
should
actively
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take part
in various
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activities
to enhance their
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abilities
in all aspects.

Besides
, joining
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some
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other
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activities
is
also
conducive to the improvement of
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learning
efficiency. If a
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student
spends almost all of her time on
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learning
, it will be
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hard
for her to find the fun of
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learning
and trigger her
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negative
emotion, which will
greatly
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reduce
their
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learning
efficiency.
Therefore
, at this time, they should
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join
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some
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other
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activities
to
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help
them relieve the boredom of
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learning
and
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change
the mood.
For example
, through participating in sports games can relax their body and relieve pressure from studying, or taking part in
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some
social
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activities
motivate them to know
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some
friends with same hobby or pursuit
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so
that they can exchange
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some
experiences in
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learning
and encourage each
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other
.
Thus
, go through appropriate relaxation, they can readjust their mentality and find the motivation and energy for
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learning
, which is
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very
helpful for the improvement of
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learning
efficiency.

In conclusion
, I
fully
support the view that college
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students
should pay much attention to
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other
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activities
rather
than
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just
focusing on
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learning
their
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own
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professional
knowledge.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay describe ideal marriage partner. what are the qualities do you think are important for husband or wife? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
383 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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