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some people say that giving aid to poor countries has more negative effects than positive ones. To what txtent do you agree or disagree v.1

some people say that giving aid to poor countries has more negative effects than positive ones. To what txtent v. 1
A generation ago, teaching in a high school was considered an extremely well-respected and popular job, and in some countries this is still true. However, in many parts of the world, there has been a sharp drop in the number of young people who want to become high school teachers. This essay will look at the reasons for this and propose some solutions. One of the main causes of the problem is that teachers’ salaries are lower than many other jobs. Teachers’ pay has not kept pace with that of other professions, such as law or medicine. In the UK, for example, a doctor with five years’ experience will earn far more than a teacher with the same experience. The solution is for the government to raise teachers’ pay significantly, which would attract more people into the profession. Another issue is that many children do not behave well in class. That is to say, teachers often have to deal with pupils who disobey them, which often causes them to give up teaching. This tends to put off potential teachers as well. To tackle this issue, parents must give their children a sense of respect for teachers, in order to make children behave better in class. At third cause of the obstacle is that teachers often have too much work to do. Most teachers are snowed under with marking and paperwork, which means that they have to stay late at school and work at home in the evening. As a result, many teachers are tired and stressed, and their job has a negative effect on their family life. The way forward could be cut teachers’ hours, and to take on more teaching assistants, which would make teaching and easier profession. To sum up, teaching has become a much less popular job in many countries, due to reasons such as the salary, the working hours and pupils’ behaviour. This is a serious issue, and unless we can get more talented young people to become teachers, the education of our children will suffer. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with parents and the government.
A generation ago,
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teaching
in a high school
was considered
an
extremely
well-respected and popular
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job
, and in
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some
countries this is
still
true.
However
, in
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many
parts of the world, there has been a sharp drop in the number of young
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people
who want to become high school
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teachers
. This essay will look at the reasons for this and propose
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some
solutions.

One of the main causes of the problem is that
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teachers’
salaries are lower than
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many
other
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jobs
.
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Teachers’
pay has not
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kept
pace with that of other professions, such as law or medicine. In the UK,
for example
, a doctor with five years’ experience will earn far more than a
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teacher
with the same experience. The solution is for the
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government
to raise
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teachers’
pay
significantly
, which would attract more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
into the profession.

Another issue is that
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many
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children
do not behave well in
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class
.
That is
to say,
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teachers
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often
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have to
deal with pupils who disobey them, which
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often
causes them to give up
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teaching
. This tends to put off potential
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teachers
as well
. To tackle this issue, parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
give their
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children
a sense of respect for
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teachers
, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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children
behave better in
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class
.

At third cause of the obstacle is that
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teachers
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often
have too much work to do. Most
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teachers
are snowed
under with marking and paperwork, which means that they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
stay late at school and work at home in the evening.
As a result
,
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many
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teachers
are tired
and
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stressed
, and their
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job
has a
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negative
effect on their family life. The way forward could be
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cut
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teachers’
hours, and to take on more
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teaching
assistants, which would
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make
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teaching
and easier profession.

To sum up,
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teaching
has become a much less popular
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job
in
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many
countries, due to reasons such as the salary, the working hours and pupils’
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behaviour
. This is a serious issue, and unless we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more talented young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to become
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
, the education of our
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children
will suffer. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with parents and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people say that giving aid to poor countries has more negative effects than positive ones. To what txtent v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
357 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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