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Describe changes in technology that have affected your life, and explain what effect have had on you as student. v.1

Describe changes in technology that have affected your life, and explain what effect have had on you as student. v. 1
It is an iota of doubt that, infrastructure plays a significant role in an economy's growth. The better the infrastructure the better the economy. I believe equal attention must be paid to both areas by the government for the betterment of locals. When it comes to budgeting, roads require more attention. In fact, roads are in more usage than railways for travelling purpose. For everyday travelling, individual prefer to go by their cars than going by other means which shows the increase rate of by road travelling. With the increase in income and living standards as every other individual has its own car. For instance, friends going for a trip would like to enjoy their own company and would prefer their own vehicles. Due to heavy traffic, pathways get destroyed very often. So, to rebuild them requires a lot of money. Huge trucks, tractors, and other heavy weight vehicles put pressure on the roads due to which they get damaged with time. Although, properly built ways do not get disrupted very often still they have a life span. It needs maintenance at regular intervals. Despite the fact, increasing burden has on roads government does not notice much towards its betterment. While people are facing trouble reaching their destinies on time authorities are busy doing talks only. On the other hand, railways have separate pathways where only rails are moving. So, they have less tendency to get cracked. If the path is built efficiently using good quality material, it would survive for longer time with basic maintenance. For long distance locations people tend to go for this mode and travel not very often by this mean. They require much attention when they are in progress, but once established and programmed an effective check and balance could help save costs. So, in my opinion, both are of equal importance when it comes to improving the economy. But, in terms of budgeting, roads require more money as they are more in use than railways. With the increasing load maintenance span is getting shorter and shorter ultimately requiring a plethora of money.
It is an iota of doubt that, infrastructure plays a significant role in an economy's growth. The better the infrastructure the better the economy. I believe equal attention
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must
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to both areas by the
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government
for the betterment of locals. When it
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to budgeting,
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roads
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require
more attention. In fact,
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roads
are in more usage than railways for travelling purpose.

For everyday travelling, individual prefer to go by their cars than going by
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other
means which
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shows
the increase rate of by
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road
travelling. With the increase in income and living standards as every
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other
individual has its
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own
car.
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, friends going for a trip would like to enjoy their
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own
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company
and would prefer their
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vehicles. Due to heavy traffic, pathways
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get
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destroyed
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very
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often
.
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, to rebuild them
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requires
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a lot of
money. Huge trucks, tractors, and
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other
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heavy weight
vehicles put pressure on the
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roads
due to which they
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get
damaged with time.
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,
properly
built ways do not
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get
disrupted
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still
they have a life span. It needs maintenance at regular intervals. Despite the fact, increasing burden has on
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roads
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government
does not notice much towards its betterment.
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are facing trouble reaching their destinies on time authorities are busy doing talks
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.

On the
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hand, railways have separate pathways where
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only
rails are moving.
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, they have less tendency to
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get
cracked. If the path
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using
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good
quality material, it would survive for longer time with basic maintenance. For long distance locations
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people
tend to go for this mode and travel not
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very
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by this mean. They
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require
much attention when they are in progress,
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but
once established and programmed an effective
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check
and balance could
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help
save costs.

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So
, in my opinion, both are of equal importance when it
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comes
to improving the economy.
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But
, in terms of budgeting,
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roads
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require
more money as they are more in
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use
than railways. With the increasing load maintenance span is getting shorter and shorter
ultimately
requiring a plethora of money.
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IELTS essay Describe changes in technology that have affected your life, and explain what effect have had on you as student. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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