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A company has announced that wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages if this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position. v.1

A company has announced that wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages if this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position. v. 1
In almost all countries, old and ancient traditional languages have been unremembered or wiped out due to people migration or colonialism. This should be argued, which I will consider in here. On the one hand, critics claim that this will happen every time, whenever the world gets transformed by means of technology or the ageing population of older people who are outnumbered and are well aware of their mother tongue. For instance, if we look countries like Africa or other Asian countries their languages has been inevitably outspoken due to colonialism. Although in some parts of their areas like villages, district's traditional language has been spoken. Although it still appears the case, these native tongue has been rarely spoken. The other side of the debate says that, planning needs to be done to prevent their ancient accent from dying. In several countries the locals have been teaching their mother tongue to other nationalities because to prevent their language from dying or being abandoned. If this will be the case, then it will be prevented. A final point is that traditional languages should be taught in schools at an early age when a child gets admission in the school because of the child gets used to speaking their mother tongue then he can teach to other generations when he grows up. For example, if we look at countries like china, japan their children have been taught at an early age because of that everything which has been generated in their countries will be written or spoken in local language. In summary, it appears that initiatives should be taken by government authorities. Policies should be made & a longer- term, thoughtful programme is surely needed to teach their younger generations.
In almost all
countries
,
old
and ancient traditional
languages
have
been unremembered
or wiped out due to
people
migration or colonialism. This should
be argued
, which I will consider in here.

On the one hand, critics claim that this will happen every time, whenever the world
gets
transformed by means of technology or the
ageing
population of older
people
who
are outnumbered
and are well aware of their mother
tongue
.
For instance
, if we look
countries
like Africa or
other
Asian
countries
their
languages
has been
inevitably
outspoken due to colonialism. Although in
some
parts of their areas like villages, district's traditional
language
has
been spoken
. Although it
still
appears the case, these native
tongue
has been rarely
spoken.

The
other
side of the debate says that, planning needs to
be done
to
prevent
their ancient accent from dying. In several
countries
the locals have been teaching their mother
tongue
to
other
nationalities
because
to
prevent
their
language
from dying or
being abandoned
. If this will be the case, then it will be
prevented
. A final point is that traditional
languages
should
be taught
in schools at an early age when a child
gets
admission in the school
because
of the child
gets
used
to speaking their mother
tongue
then he can teach to
other
generations when he grows up.
For example
, if we look at
countries
like
china
, japan their children have
been taught
at an early age
because
of that everything which has
been generated
in their
countries
will
be written
or spoken in local language.

In summary, it appears that initiatives should
be taken
by
government
authorities. Policies should
be made
& a longer- term, thoughtful
programme
is
surely
needed to teach their younger generations.
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IELTS essay A company has announced that wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages if this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
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