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Describe an open air or street market which you enjoyed visiting: you should say, where it is, what it sells, how big it is; and explain why you enjoyed visiting the market v.1

Describe an open air or street market which you enjoyed visiting: you should say, where it is, what it sells, how big it is; and explain why you enjoyed visiting the market v. 1
IT IS TRUE THAT THERE IS WIDESPREAD CONCERN OVER THE PRACTICE OF EXTREME SPORTS, TO THE EXTENT THAT SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT THEY SHOULD BE OUTLAWED BY GOVERNMENT LEGISLATION. WHILE NOBODY SHOULD UNDERESTIMATE THE RISKS, I WOULD ARGUE THAT PEOPLE SHOULD BE FREE TO PRACTICE SUCH SPORTS IF THEY SO WISH. ON THE ONE HAND, CRITICS OF DANGEROUS SPORTS GIVE STRONG REASONS WHY GOVERNMENTS SHOULD IMPOSE AN OFFICIAL BAN ON SUCH ACTIVITIES. FIRSTLY, THEY ARGUE THAT SUCH A MEASURE IS NECESSARY ON SAFETY GROUNDS. THERE HAVE BEEN NUMEROUS INCIDENTS WHERE MEMBERS OF RESCUE SERVICES HAVE HAD TO PUT THEIR OWN LIVES AT RISK TO SAVE EXTREME SPORTS ENTHUSIASTS WHO ARE IN LIFE-THREATENING SITUATIONS. SECONDLY, IT IS NECESSARY AT TIMES TO INFRINGE ON PERSONAL FREEDOMS BECAUSE PEOPLE WHO LACK THE NECESSARY EXPERIENCE OR WHO ARE NOT IN THE PEAK OF PHYSICAL CONDITION SOMETIMES TAKE UP DANGEROUS SPORTS. SUCH IRRESPONSIBLE BEHAVIOUR CAN ONLY BE PREVENTED BY BANNING THESE SPORTS. ON THE OTHER HAND, I CONCUR WITH THOSE WHO ARGUE THAT PEOPLE SHOULD BE FREE TO DO EXTREME SPORTS, ALTHOUGH I BELIEVE IT IS NECESSARY FOR INDIVIDUALS TO ABIDE BY THE SAFETY RULES. ONE REASON IS THAT THE IMPOSITION OF SENSIBLE SAFETY MEASURES HAS BEEN PROVEN TO MINIMIZE THE RISK OF ACCIDENTS AND INJURIES. FOR EXAMPLE, ALL SPORTS WHICH CARRY A SIGNIFICANT ELEMENT OF DANGER, SUCH AS SCUBA DIVING OR PARAGLIDING SHOULD BE SUPERVISED BY AN EXPERIENCED AND PROFESSIONALLY QUALIFIED INSTRUCTOR. ANOTHER FACTOR IS THAT THERE IS NOW A RANGE OF ESSENTIAL SPORTS GEAR TO PROTECT THOSE WHO PRACTICE DANGEROUS SPORTS. SUCH EQUIPMENT RANGES FROM SAFETY ROPES AND HELMETS TO WATER-RESISTANT CLOTHING. IN CONCLUSION, IT SEEMS TO ME THAT DANGEROUS SPORTS SHOULD BE PERMITTED, ALTHOUGH THOSE WHO TAKE PART HAVE A RESPONSIBILTY TO ADHERE TO THE RECOMMENDED SAFETY PROCEDURES.
IT IS TRUE THAT THERE IS WIDESPREAD CONCERN OVER THE PRACTICE OF EXTREME
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SPORTS
, TO THE EXTENT THAT
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SOME
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PEOPLE
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ARGUE
THAT THEY SHOULD
BE OUTLAWED
BY
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GOVERNMENT
LEGISLATION. WHILE NOBODY SHOULD UNDERESTIMATE THE
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RISKS
, I WOULD
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ARGUE
THAT
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PEOPLE
SHOULD BE FREE TO PRACTICE SUCH
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SPORTS
IF THEY
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SO
WISH.

ON THE ONE HAND, CRITICS OF
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DANGEROUS
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SPORTS
GIVE STRONG REASONS WHY
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GOVERNMENTS
SHOULD IMPOSE AN OFFICIAL BAN ON SUCH ACTIVITIES.
FIRSTLY
, THEY
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ARGUE
THAT SUCH A MEASURE IS
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NECESSARY
ON
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SAFETY
GROUNDS. THERE HAVE BEEN NUMEROUS INCIDENTS WHERE MEMBERS OF RESCUE SERVICES HAVE HAD TO PUT THEIR
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OWN
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LIVES
AT
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RISK
TO SAVE EXTREME
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SPORTS
ENTHUSIASTS
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WHO
ARE IN LIFE-THREATENING SITUATIONS.
SECONDLY
, IT IS
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NECESSARY
AT TIMES TO INFRINGE ON PERSONAL FREEDOMS
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BECAUSE
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PEOPLE
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WHO
LACK THE
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NECESSARY
EXPERIENCE OR
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WHO
ARE NOT IN THE PEAK OF PHYSICAL CONDITION
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SOMETIMES
TAKE UP
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DANGEROUS
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SPORTS
. SUCH IRRESPONSIBLE
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BEHAVIOUR
CAN
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ONLY
BE
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PREVENTED
BY BANNING THESE SPORTS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, I CONCUR WITH THOSE
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WHO
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ARGUE
THAT
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PEOPLE
SHOULD BE FREE TO DO EXTREME
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SPORTS
, ALTHOUGH I BELIEVE IT IS
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NECESSARY
FOR INDIVIDUALS TO ABIDE BY THE
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SAFETY
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RULES
. ONE REASON IS THAT THE IMPOSITION OF SENSIBLE
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SAFETY
MEASURES HAS
BEEN PROVEN
TO MINIMIZE THE
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RISK
OF ACCIDENTS AND INJURIES.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ALL
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SPORTS
WHICH CARRY A SIGNIFICANT ELEMENT OF
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DANGER
, SUCH AS SCUBA DIVING OR PARAGLIDING SHOULD
BE SUPERVISED
BY AN EXPERIENCED AND
PROFESSIONALLY
QUALIFIED INSTRUCTOR. ANOTHER FACTOR IS THAT THERE IS
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NOW
A RANGE OF ESSENTIAL
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SPORTS
GEAR TO PROTECT THOSE
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WHO
PRACTICE
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DANGEROUS
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SPORTS
. SUCH EQUIPMENT RANGES FROM
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SAFETY
ROPES AND HELMETS TO WATER-RESISTANT CLOTHING.

IN CONCLUSION
, IT SEEMS TO ME THAT
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DANGEROUS
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SPORTS
SHOULD
BE PERMITTED
, ALTHOUGH THOSE
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WHO
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TAKE PART
HAVE A
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RESPONSIBILTY
TO ADHERE TO THE RECOMMENDED
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SAFETY
PROCEDURES.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe an open air or street market which you enjoyed visiting: you should say, where it is, what it sells, how big it is; and explain why you enjoyed visiting the market v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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