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Describe a song or piece of music you like. You should say: •What the song or music is•What kind of song or music it is•Where you first heard it•And explain why you like it v.1

Describe a song or piece of music you like. You should say: •What the song or music is•What kind of song or music it is•Where you first heard it•And explain why you like it v. 1
If there is one thing over the past twenty years that has taken the world by storm, it is the revolution of computers. Today we have seen a rapid growth in the use of computers in our day to day life. But one question still remains. How have computers impacted education and learning. The biggest change we have seen is in the classroom itself. All teachers have to do today is make a simple PowerPoint presentation detailing the main points in the lesson. Subjects like science are made easy with simple animations to show the internal workings of devices. Showing Videos or documentaries related to History or Geography piques the interest of the student. Learning Computer programming is especially simple with a computer as it is the very purpose a computer is used for. With the birth of the internet, assignments are shared online making it easy for students to download it to their systems to solve them. Another medium which has shown promise in sharing knowledge via computers has boomed is through Massive open online courses. Major universities and Individuals skilled in certain topics have platforms on the internet to share their knowledge by making courses tailored to specific topics related to a particular skill. Learning software development is very popular using the platform, where students are taught how to make a computer do trivial or complicated tasks. Some universities even offer course certificates for a fee on completion of the courses which can boost the career of individuals participating in them. Despite the merits of using systems as a medium, there are still certain areas about it can be overbearing. Students have to be taught to operate them before using it. Mathematical calculations are simplified by the use of calculators. Students will find it difficult to cope with the basics of calculations by hand, such as multiplications and additions. Complicated symbols used for terms in Science and Mathematics are much easier to write than type. A good education is not only depicted by the technology used, but also by the teacher responsible for teaching the subject. A lot of investment should go into digitizing education, and not everyone would have the luxury to buy computers as they can tend to be expensive. To conclude, Computers definitely have had their impact on the way education is visualized today. From books to Powerpoints, From diagrams to Animations, from classrooms to the internet, it is a drastic change and a giant leap. However, some aspects of education will and always should stay at its roots. Having the knowledge of how it was done before computers were a thing paves way to deal with situations when computers are out of reach or un-available.
If there is one thing over the past twenty years that has taken the world by storm, it is the revolution of computers.
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Today
we have
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seen
a rapid growth in the
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use
of computers in our
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day to day
life.
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But
one question
still
remains. How have computers impacted
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education
and learning.

The biggest
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change
we have
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seen
is in the classroom itself. All teachers
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have to
do
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today
is
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make
a simple PowerPoint presentation detailing the main points in the lesson. Subjects like science
are made
easy with simple animations to
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show
the internal workings of devices. Showing Videos or documentaries related to History or Geography piques the interest of the
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student
. Learning Computer programming is
especially
simple with a computer as it is the
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very
purpose a computer is
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used
for. With the birth of the internet, assignments
are shared
online making it easy for
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students
to download it to their systems to solve them.

Another medium which has shown promise in sharing knowledge via computers has boomed is through Massive open online
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courses
. Major universities and Individuals skilled in certain topics have platforms on the internet to share their knowledge by making
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courses
tailored to specific topics related to a particular
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skill
. Learning software development is
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very
popular using the platform, where
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students
are taught
how to
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make
a computer do trivial or complicated tasks.
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Some
universities even offer
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course
certificates for a fee on completion of the
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courses
which can boost the career of individuals participating in them.

Despite the merits of using systems as a medium, there are
still
certain areas about it can be overbearing.
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Students
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have to
be taught
to operate them
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before
using it. Mathematical calculations
are simplified
by the
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use
of calculators.
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Students
will find it difficult to cope with the basics of calculations by hand, such as multiplications and additions. Complicated symbols
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used
for terms in Science and Mathematics are much easier to write than type. A
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good
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education
is not
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only
depicted by the technology
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used
,
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but
also
by the teacher responsible for teaching the subject.
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A lot of
investment should go into digitizing
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education
, and not everyone would have the luxury to
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buy
computers as they can tend to be expensive.

To conclude
, Computers definitely have had their impact on the way
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education
is visualized
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today
. From books to
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Powerpoints
, From diagrams to Animations, from classrooms to the internet, it is a drastic
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change
and a giant leap.
However
,
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some
aspects of
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education
will and always should stay at its roots. Having the knowledge of how it
was done
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before
computers were a thing paves way to deal with situations when computers are out of reach or
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un-available
.
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Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Describe a song or piece of music you like. You should say: •What the song or music is•What kind of song or music it is•Where you first heard it•And explain why you like it v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
451 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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