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Describe an object you particularly like. You should say: •What it is and what it looks like•What it is made of•What it is for•And explain why it is special for you v.1

Describe an object you particularly like. You should say: •What it is and what it looks like•What it is made of•What it is for•And explain why it is special for you v. 1
Education and health care are two elements of the local citizens's survival n societies and the charge to assess them varies in terms of local governments. Some people advocate that governments should be responsible for funding them completely; while, others insist that it is people's personal tasks.  The essay will discuss both views and presents my personal opinion as well. To begin with, universal health care and education coverage will enhance the local residents' happiness for which they are more  willing to contribute themselves to their nations.  As a result, nations will become more powerful and competitive because of their strong and well-educated citizens. For example, Bhutan is one of small Asian countries with free access to these two services since its beginning for which it has become one of the countries with highest National Happiness Index and the strongest military force. Free access to health care and education provide a harmonious environment for residents to grow and raise their families. However, no charge of health care and education will also create some drawbacks. The first one is that the services may be abused if residents and professionals who are in charge of the services do not follow strict guidelines. Therefore, universal services will lead to burdens for governments' budgets. In addiction, the efficiency of the health care system and motivation of education might be diminished. For instance, in Canada, universal health care service leads to longest waiting time for seeing specialists or operating. In conclusion, free health care and education coverage will bring either benefits or drawbacks listed above. It definitely makes ordinary residents happy and less stressful by eliminating the financial burden of medical bills and education tuition. However, in order to maintain these two services's qualities, clients should have access to them properly or they will collapses and local citizens will suffer.
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are two elements of the
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local
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citizens's
survival n societies and the charge to assess them varies in terms of
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local
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governments
.
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Some
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people
advocate that
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governments
should be responsible for funding them completely; while, others insist that it is
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people
's personal tasks.  The essay will discuss both views and presents my personal opinion
as well
.

To
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begin
with, universal
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health
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care
and
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education
coverage will enhance the
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local
residents' happiness for which they are more
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willing to contribute themselves to their nations.  
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, nations will become more powerful and competitive
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because
of their strong and well-educated citizens.
For example
, Bhutan is one of
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small
Asian countries with free access to these two services since its beginning for which it has become one of the countries with
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highest
National Happiness Index and the strongest military force. Free access to
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health
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care
and
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education
provide a harmonious environment for residents to grow and raise their families.

However
, no charge of
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health
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and
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education
will
also
create
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some
drawbacks. The
first
one is that the services may
be abused
 if residents and professionals who are in charge of the services do not follow strict guidelines.
Therefore
, universal services will lead to burdens for
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governments
' budgets. In addiction, the efficiency of the
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health
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care
system and motivation of
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education
might
be diminished
.
For instance
, in Canada, universal
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health
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care
service leads to
A determiner is probably missing here: "the longest".
longest
waiting time for seeing specialists or operating.

In conclusion
, free
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health
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care
and
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education
coverage will bring either benefits or drawbacks listed above. It definitely
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makes
ordinary residents happy and less stressful by eliminating the financial burden of medical bills and
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education
tuition.
However
, in order to maintain these two
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services's
qualities, clients should have access to them
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properly or
they will
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collapses
and
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local
citizens will suffer.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe an object you particularly like. You should say: •What it is and what it looks like•What it is made of•What it is for•And explain why it is special for you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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