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1819 describe a place that has a special meaning to you. you should saywhat kind of place it is and where it iswhat it looks like what sounds you associate with itand explain why you particularly like the place. v.1

1819 describe a place that has a special meaning to you. you should saywhat kind of place it is and where it iswhat it looks like what sounds you associate with itand explain why you particularly like the place. v. 1
It is true that some companies complain about the poor interpersonal skills of their new staff. While some reasons for this can be identified, there are solutions which firms should adopt. As many new employees are school-leavers, the causes of this problem can be found in the home and in the school. A child’s personality is shaped during the formative years of home-life and schooling. In terms of the home, close-knit families are a thing of the past in many societies, and youngsters do not learn to live in harmony with one another and with their parents. For example, meal times used to be occasions when families ate together and discussed the tasks to be done and the problems of each family member. In school, children are encouraged to achieve individual excellence in exams, rather than to have social skills and to be team-players. However, in order to conduct a business efficiently, firms must take steps to train new employees to acquire interpersonal skills. Firstly, cooperative skills shoud be developed, making the most of the latest management techniques. Some companies in Europe and the USA, for example, organise challenging activity weekends during which staff must work as teams to do mountain-climbing or climbing and camping. Working together, their survival skills are put to the test. Secondly, codes of conduct at work should be strictly enforced for both new and existing employees to facilitate communication and cooperation. In conclusion, although some reasons can be suggested as probable causes of this problem, there are measures which companies should take to develop the interpersonal skills of new staff.
It is true that
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some
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companies
complain about the poor interpersonal
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skills
of their
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new
staff. While
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some
reasons for this can
be identified
, there are solutions which firms should adopt.

As
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many
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new
employees are school-leavers, the causes of this problem can
be found
in the home and in the school. A child’s personality
is shaped
during the formative years of home-life and schooling. In terms of the home, close-knit families are a thing of the past in
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many
societies, and youngsters do not learn to
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live
in harmony with one another and with their parents.
For example
, meal times
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used
to be occasions when families ate together and discussed the tasks to
be done
and the problems of each family member. In school, children
are encouraged
to achieve individual excellence in exams,
rather
than to have social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
and to be team-players.

However
, in order to conduct a business
efficiently
, firms
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must
take steps to train
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new
employees to acquire interpersonal
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skills
.
Firstly
, cooperative
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skills
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shoud
be developed
, making the most of the latest management techniques.
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Some
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companies
in Europe and the USA,
for example
,
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organise
challenging activity weekends during which staff
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
work as teams to do mountain-climbing or climbing and camping. Working together, their survival
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skills
are put
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
.
Secondly
, codes of conduct at work should be
strictly
enforced for both
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new
and existing employees to facilitate communication and cooperation.

In conclusion
, although
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some
reasons can
be suggested
as probable causes of this problem, there are measures which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
should take to develop the interpersonal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
staff.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 1819 describe a place that has a special meaning to you. you should saywhat kind of place it is and where it iswhat it looks like what sounds you associate with itand explain why you particularly like the place. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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