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Describe a useful website you have visitedyou should say: what the website washow you found the address for this websitewhat the website containedexplain why it was useful to you v.1

Describe a useful website you have visitedyou should say: what the website washow you found the address for this websitewhat the website containedexplain why it was useful to you v. 1
It is a fact that our contemporary living communities have been more complex that those in the past; therefore, some parents prefer homeschooling for their children. Others believe that school education is much important and superior to homeschooling. The essay will discuss both benefits and presents my view that I support the latter. To begin with, homeschooling has become popular in certain region worldwide. Firstly, it provides flexible schedules for children and their parents, which also reduce stress for both due to elimination of peer pressure or routine school schedules. In addition, homeschooling provides options for students to select learning content in terms of their personal interests and inborn gifts. For example, many famous Chinese athletes had homeschooling experiences because they could focus on taking training courses. Finally, homeschooling provides safer learning environments for children. They will have less chances to nurture bad habits such as smoking, drinking or doing drugs because  they are supervised by their parents. On the other hand, some parents believe that school education is a better option for their children. Firstly, curricula are systemic and profound because they are composed of experienced educators in terms of children's development stages. Moreover, school environments provide opportunities for students to develop their skills such as interpersonal interaction, communication, cooperation, public speech, etc. Last but not the least, students at school need to learn to obey the rules, to follow their daily agenda, and to organize their personal things. As a result, school education will train students' capacities for their future post-secondary academic education and professional careers in their later lives. In summary, I personally opine school education because it provides suitable learning contents for regular students. Besides, it provides mimic social atmospheres for students to navigate and cooperate with their peers and teachers. This will enhance their personal capacities. Although homeschooling is less stressful for students and parents, it is only suitable for certain students due to the above reasons. Therefore, in the current global societies, school education are a major trend for ordinary students because of the above reasons.
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. Others believe that
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school
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is much
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and superior to homeschooling. The essay will discuss both benefits and presents my view that I support the latter.

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with, homeschooling has become popular in certain region worldwide.
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children
and their
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parents
, which
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reduce
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for both due to elimination of peer pressure or routine
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schedules.
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, homeschooling
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provides
options for
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to select learning content in terms of their personal interests and inborn gifts.
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Chinese athletes had homeschooling experiences
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they could focus on taking training courses.
Finally
, homeschooling
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provides
safer learning environments for
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children
. They will have
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.
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, to follow their daily agenda, and to organize their personal things.
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will train students' capacities for their future post-secondary academic
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and professional careers in their later
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.
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provides
mimic social atmospheres for
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students
to navigate and cooperate with their peers and teachers. This will enhance their personal capacities. Although homeschooling is less stressful for
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students
and
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parents
, it is
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students
due to the above reasons.
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current
global societies,
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education
are a major trend for ordinary
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IELTS essay Describe a useful website you have visitedyou should say: what the website washow you found the address for this websitewhat the website containedexplain why it was useful to you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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