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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught, while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is use later in life. Discuss both views. v.2

Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught, while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is use later in life. v. 2
DUE TO THE INCREASE IN VEHICLES AROUND THE GLOBE, ENVIRONMENTAL MENACE SURGED TOO. HENCE, THIS ESSAY WILL CONCURE 100% WITH THE IDEA THAT ADVICED TO FROBBIDE THE USAGE OF MOTOR CARS. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW IT AFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT AND SECONDLY HOW IT IS BENEFICIAL TO HAVE THE ELECTRONIC CARS THAN FOSSIL FUELS CARS. ON THE ONE HAND, VEHICLES THAT RUNS ON THE PETROL OR DISSEL EXHAUST THE LIFE THREATENNING GASES LIKE CARBON MONOXIDE AND DIOXIDE. THOSE GASES ARE HIGHLY DANGEROUS WHEN INHALED BY ANIMALS AND HUMAN. AS A RESULT, HUMEN ARE TEND TO GET CERTAIN SERIOUS DISEASES SUCH AS ASTHMA, BRONCHITIS AND SO ON. FOR EXAMPLE, AS PER THE HEALTH, DEPARTMENT OF THE INDIA, 70% OF THE INDIAN CIVILIANS ARE ASTHAMATIC DUE TO THE AFFECTED SURROUNDING BY USAGE OF HIGH NUMBR OF PRIVATE MOTORS. ON THE OTHER HAND, SOME ALTERNATIVES LIKE ELECTRIC CARS, MIGHT DECLINE THE POLLUTION THAT CAUSED BY THE FOSSIL FUEL CARS. AS ELECTRIC CARS DO NOT EMITE ANY HAZARDOUS GASES OWNING TO THE FACT THAT IT RUNS ON ELECTRICITY RATHER THAN PHYSICAL FORM OF GASOLIN. FOR INSTANCE, ACCORDING TO THE USA ENVIRONMENTAL CENTER, 80% PEOPLE USES ELECTRONIC CARS THAT HAS CONTRIBUTED TO DIMINISHING THE POLLUTION IN THE ATMOSPHERE. NEVERTHELESS, IT CONSUMES THE ELCTRICITY THAT USAGE MORE POWER. IN CONCLUSION, FOSSILE FUELS CARS INDEED GIVE MORE AVARAGE AND MAITANCE OF THE CARS IS ALSO CHEAPER, BUT ONE SHOULD NEVER NEGOTIATE THE ADVERSE EFFECT OF FOSSIL FUELS CARS. THAIS ONLY CAN HAPPEN WITH REGIME SUPPORT BY ENFORCING A REFRAIN RULE OF FUELS USED CARS.
DUE TO THE INCREASE IN VEHICLES AROUND THE GLOBE, ENVIRONMENTAL MENACE SURGED TOO.
HENCE
, THIS ESSAY WILL
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CONCURE
100% WITH THE
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IDEA
THAT
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ADVICED
TO
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FROBBIDE
THE USAGE OF MOTOR
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CARS
.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW IT AFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT AND
SECONDLY
HOW IT IS BENEFICIAL TO HAVE THE ELECTRONIC
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CARS
THAN
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FOSSIL
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FUELS
CARS.

ON THE ONE HAND, VEHICLES THAT RUNS ON THE PETROL OR
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DISSEL
EXHAUST THE LIFE
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THREATENNING
GASES LIKE CARBON MONOXIDE AND DIOXIDE. THOSE GASES ARE
HIGHLY
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DANGEROUS
WHEN INHALED BY ANIMALS AND HUMAN.
AS A RESULT
,
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HUMEN
ARE TEND TO
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GET
CERTAIN SERIOUS DISEASES SUCH AS ASTHMA, BRONCHITIS AND
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SO
ON.
FOR EXAMPLE
, AS PER THE HEALTH, DEPARTMENT OF THE INDIA, 70% OF THE INDIAN CIVILIANS ARE
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ASTHAMATIC
DUE TO THE
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AFFECTED
SURROUNDING BY USAGE OF HIGH
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NUMBR
OF PRIVATE MOTORS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
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SOME
ALTERNATIVES LIKE ELECTRIC
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CARS
, MIGHT DECLINE THE POLLUTION THAT CAUSED BY THE
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FOSSIL
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FUEL
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CARS
. AS ELECTRIC
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CARS
DO
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NOT EMITE
ANY HAZARDOUS GASES OWNING TO THE FACT THAT IT RUNS ON ELECTRICITY
RATHER
THAN PHYSICAL FORM OF
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GASOLIN
.
FOR INSTANCE
,

ACCORDING TO THE USA ENVIRONMENTAL CENTER, 80%
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PEOPLE
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USES
ELECTRONIC
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CARS
THAT HAS CONTRIBUTED TO DIMINISHING THE POLLUTION IN THE ATMOSPHERE.
NEVERTHELESS
, IT CONSUMES THE
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ELCTRICITY
THAT USAGE MORE POWER.

IN CONCLUSION
,
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FOSSILE
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FUELS
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CARS
INDEED
GIVE MORE
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AVARAGE
AND
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MAITANCE
OF THE
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CARS
IS
ALSO
CHEAPER,
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BUT
ONE SHOULD NEVER NEGOTIATE THE ADVERSE EFFECT OF
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FOSSIL
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FUELS
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CARS
. THAIS
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ONLY
CAN HAPPEN WITH REGIME SUPPORT BY ENFORCING A REFRAIN
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RULE
OF
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FUELS
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USED
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CARS
.
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IELTS essay Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught, while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is use later in life. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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