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Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interestingYou should say; what the documentary was aboutwhy you decided to watch itwhat you learnt during the documentary and explain why the documentary was particularly interesting? v.1

Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interestingYou should say; what the documentary was aboutwhy you decided to watch itwhat you learnt during the documentary and explain why the documentary was particularly interesting? v. 1
Climate change has emerged as a major problem in recent decades. Many people advocate that trees should be planted on unused land in various cities and towns, whereas others argue building houses is more important. I believe is owed to the environmental challenges being faced by humanity, plantation of trees should be made a top priority. Trees play a vital role in cleaning the air and prove significantly effective in dealing with pollution problems. Statistics indicate that air quality in big cities has dropped rapidly worldwide in the last few years. This has lead to the emergence of environmental issues like smog, which has detrimental effects on the respiratory system of humans. For instance, the incidence of lung cancer has increased in Pakistan due to excessive pollution. Moreover, massive smoke from vehicles has resulted in various types of allergies and other health issues. Therefore, growing trees inland not being used for housing purposes can lead to healthy air in towns and cities. The major reason for people supporting building houses instead of growing plants is catering to the needs of the homeless. They think that those without a home should be provided with a basic facility like a roof for a living and spare land in cities can be used for this purpose. However, such people can be accommodated in large houses already built by the community and unused land should be used for the collective benefit of humanity instead. Also, having a home is largely useless if the quality of life is abysmal due to breathing in unclean air. Hence, using extra land for trees is far more important to ensure a better life on earth. To conclude, some people advocate building residences in a spare area of towns and cities to help homeless people. However, in my opinion, those people should be given shared space in already established residential facilities and land should be used for vegetation. Considering pollution indices and climate change, it is the only way to protect humanity and improve its standards of living.
Climate
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change
has emerged as a major problem in recent decades.
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Many
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people
advocate that
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trees
should
be planted
on unused
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land
in various
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cities
and towns, whereas others argue building
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houses
is more
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important
. I believe
is owed
to the environmental challenges
being faced
by humanity, plantation of
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trees
should
be made
a top priority.

Trees play a vital role in cleaning the
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air
and prove
significantly
effective in dealing with pollution problems. Statistics indicate that
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air
quality in
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big
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cities
has dropped
rapidly
worldwide in the last few years. This has lead to the emergence of environmental issues like smog, which has detrimental effects on the respiratory system of humans.
For instance
, the incidence of lung cancer has increased in Pakistan due to excessive pollution.
Moreover
, massive smoke from vehicles has resulted in various types of allergies and other health issues.
Therefore
, growing
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trees
inland not being
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used
for housing purposes can lead to healthy
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air
in towns and cities.

The major reason for
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people
supporting building
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houses
instead
of growing plants is catering to the needs of the homeless. They
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think
that those without a home should
be provided
with a basic facility like a roof for a living and spare
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land
in
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cities
can be
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used
for this purpose.
However
, such
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people
can
be accommodated
in large
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houses
already built by the community and unused
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land
should be
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used
for the collective benefit of humanity
instead
.
Also
, having a home is
largely
useless if the quality of life is abysmal due to breathing in unclean
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air
.
Hence
, using extra
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land
for
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trees
is far more
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important
to ensure a better life on earth.

To conclude
,
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some
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people
advocate building residences in a spare area of towns and
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cities
to
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help
homeless
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people
.
However
, in my opinion, those
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people
should be
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given
shared space in already established residential facilities and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
land
should be
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used
for vegetation. Considering pollution indices and climate
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change
, it is the
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only
way to protect humanity and
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improve
its standards of living.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interestingYou should say; what the documentary was aboutwhy you decided to watch itwhat you learnt during the documentary and explain why the documentary was particularly interesting? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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