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Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school; you should say; when & where you started studying, what lessons were like, what made it different from other subjects, explain why you enjoyed it. v.1

Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school; you should say; when & where you started studying, what lessons were like, what made it different from other subjects, explain why you enjoyed it. v. 1
Technology has greatly improved lifestyles in our world today, especially in the agricultural sector. This can be seen from the way we manufacture foods down to the method of distribution to consumers. Certain people would choose to purchase meals in a supermarket rather than shop for food online; while others will like to settle for the latter. The idea of purchasing meals in supermarkets is mostly accompanied with the believe that such food is not stale. These are people who are particular about freshly made foods. Leftover or refrigerated foods are usually not an option for such individuals. In addition to this, is the issue of cleanness. The environment where the food is being made beginning from the maker of the meal to the kitchen utensils used is also an important factor to be scrutinized thus can not be over emphasized. An example of such individuals are those in the medical field. Nevertheless, others prefer to purchase their food online because it is easy, saves energy and encourages time management. This method comes with an option of delivering the meal directly to the consumer's doorstep. Report has it that in the past three years, 82% of the United States citizens prefer to buy their food mostly online. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is most preferable to buy meals in the supermarket than online because one needs to be aware of the state of the food to be bought for health purposes. However, it is pertinent to survey the environment where the dish was prepared.
Technology has
greatly
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improved
lifestyles in our world
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today
,
especially
in the agricultural sector. This can be
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seen
from the way we manufacture
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foods
down to the method of distribution to consumers. Certain
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people
would choose to
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purchase
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meals
in a supermarket
rather
than shop for
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food
online; while others will like to settle for the latter.

The
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idea
of purchasing
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meals
in supermarkets is
mostly
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompanied by".
accompanied with
the
Did you mean "belief" (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
believe
that such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is not stale. These are
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people
who are particular about
freshly
made
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foods
. Leftover or refrigerated
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foods
are
usually
not an option for such individuals.
In addition
to this, is the issue of cleanness. The environment where the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is
being made
beginning from the maker of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
to the kitchen utensils
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used
is
also
an
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important
factor to
be scrutinized
thus
can not be over emphasized. An example of such individuals are those in the medical field.

Nevertheless
, others prefer to
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purchase
their
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food
online
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because
it is easy, saves energy and encourages time management. This method
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comes
with an option of delivering the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
directly
to the consumer's doorstep. Report has it that in the past three years, 82% of the United States citizens prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
their
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food
mostly
online.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that it is most preferable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
in the supermarket than online
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
one needs to be aware of the state of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
for health purposes.
However
, it is pertinent to survey the environment where the dish
was prepared
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school; you should say; when & where you started studying, what lessons were like, what made it different from other subjects, explain why you enjoyed it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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