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Describe a special opportunity given to you. Why does this opportunity sospecial to you? Your explanation should include specific details andexamples. v.1

Describe a special opportunity given to you. Why does this opportunity sospecial to you? Your explanation should include specific details andexamples. v. 1
In a certain number of countries, waste materials are not recycled in the proper amounts. This essay will discuss the possible causes of this problem, and any potential solutions as well. There are a couple reasons why this problem happens. The first reason happens more frequently in poor countries, which is the lack of good infrastructure for dealing with garbage and its recycling, as those countries tend to not recycle, but to bury it in landfills or maybe incinerate it. The other cause for it, also tends to happen more in poor nations, is the population unaware of this problem, and because of this, does not search for recycling centres or separate the garbage, however, the people mix the types of trash in the same bag, organic, paper, plastic, and leave them to be collected by garbage trucks that will take it to the landfill to be buried. The bad infrastructure combined with the unaware by the population make the recycling system to not work properly with these nations. Nevertheless, there are a few solutions that can be applied to fighting this issue. Firstly, raise the awareness, because, if the people has more attention directed to this problem, they can act, as an example, they can start to take their rubbish for recycling centres, and in addition, they can pressure their governments to take measures, measures as investing in more infrastructure and building more recycling centres. A second solution is to the United Nations (UN) make strict international laws for waste recycling, with severe punishments for the ones who do not obey this law, punishments as fines, and the UN should also provide assistance to countries that are too poor to implement changes. In conclusion, this issue can have many causes, poor infrastructure, unaware of it and others, as well as many solutions, educating the population, strict international laws and assistance for implementing changes in poor nations. This problem will never be solved if humanity does not take action, otherwise, it will lead to severe environmental damage in the future, and if nature is hurt, we will hurt too.
In a certain number of
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countries
, waste materials are not recycled in the proper amounts. This essay will discuss the possible causes of this
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problem
, and any potential
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solutions
as well
.

There are a
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couple
reasons why this
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problem
happens. The
first
reason happens more
frequently
in
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poor
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countries
, which is the lack of
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good
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infrastructure
for dealing with garbage and its
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recycling
, as those
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countries
tend to not recycle,
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but
to bury it in landfills or maybe incinerate it. The other cause for it,
also
tends to happen more in
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poor
nations, is the population unaware of this
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problem
, and
because of this
, does not search for
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recycling
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centres
or separate the garbage,
however
, the
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people
mix the types of trash in the same bag, organic, paper, plastic, and
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leave
them to
be collected
by garbage trucks that will take it to the landfill to
be buried
.
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The
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bad
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infrastructure
combined with the unaware by the population
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make
the
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recycling
system to not work
properly
with these nations.

Nevertheless
, there are a few
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solutions
that can
be applied
to fighting this issue.
Firstly
, raise the awareness,
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because
, if the
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people
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has
more attention directed to this
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problem
, they can act, as an example, they can
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start
to take their rubbish for
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recycling
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centres
, and
in addition
, they can pressure their
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governments
to take measures, measures as investing in more
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infrastructure
and building more
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recycling
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centres
. A second
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solution
is to the United Nations (UN)
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make
strict international laws for waste
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recycling
, with severe punishments for the ones who do not obey this law, punishments as fines, and the UN should
also
provide assistance to
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countries
that are too
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poor
to implement
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changes
.

In conclusion
, this issue can have
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many
causes,
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poor
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infrastructure
, unaware of it
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and others
,
as well
as
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many
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solutions
, educating the population, strict international laws and assistance for implementing
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changes
in
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poor
nations. This
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problem
will never
be solved
if humanity does not take action,
otherwise
, it will lead to severe environmental damage in the future, and if nature
is hurt
, we will hurt too.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a special opportunity given to you. Why does this opportunity sospecial to you? Your explanation should include specific details andexamples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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