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5. Describe a difficult experience and how you overcome it. Include details andexamples in your explanation. v.1

5. Describe a difficult experience and how you overcome it. Include details andexamples in your explanation. v. 1
Replacing the old building with the new ones is compulsory regarding money spent on maintaining and repairing the old buildings. I personally agree with this notion to some extent, which I will explain below. First and foremost, It would seem that construction of the modern building, perhaps, would save money from maintaining and repairing building cost in some years. This means that if the societies around the building spent money on building construction, they would not spend it frequently to repair the building for a long time. In addition, it appears that new building is generally believed to provide the new perspective, ranging from the city to the country. Furthermore, the modern building would attract many tourists who are looking for the fascinating places to be posted on their social media. As a result, the modern building would increase the income for that city or country. However, it seems that knocking down the old building would cause some people do not respect their history. The reason often given is that people would lose the existence of building which can remind them of the past. Moreover, it might be said that replacing the historical building is related to the lack of culture that country hold. To illustrate, Malaysia has a crisis identity when they build many modern buildings. All in all, It is logical to conclude that historical and cultural aspects are not significant things to be considered. This is because not only would the new building construction save money from building's repairing, but help people to earn money from international tourists.
Replacing the
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old
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building
with the
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ones is compulsory regarding
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money
spent on maintaining and repairing the
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old
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buildings
. I
personally
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agree
with this notion to
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some
extent, which I will
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explain
below.

First
and foremost, It would seem that construction of the
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modern
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building
, perhaps, would save
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money
from maintaining and repairing
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building
cost in
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some
years. This means that if the societies around the
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building
spent
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money
on
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building
construction, they would not spend it
frequently
to repair the
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building
for a long time.
In addition
, it appears that
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new
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building
is
generally
believed to provide the
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new
perspective, ranging from the city to the country.
Furthermore
, the
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modern
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building
would attract
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many
tourists who are looking for the fascinating places to
be posted
on their social media.
As a result
, the
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modern
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building
would increase the income for that city or country.

However
, it seems that knocking down the
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old
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building
would cause
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some
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people
do not respect their history. The reason
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often
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given
is that
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people
would lose the existence of
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building
which can remind them of the past.
Moreover
, it might
be said
that replacing the historical
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building
is related
to the lack of culture that country hold. To illustrate, Malaysia has a crisis identity when they build
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many
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modern
buildings.

All in all, It is logical
to conclude
that historical and cultural aspects are not significant things to
be considered
. This is
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because
not
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only
would the
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new
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building
construction save
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money
from building's repairing,
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but
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help
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people
to earn
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money
from international tourists.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 5. Describe a difficult experience and how you overcome it. Include details andexamples in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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