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Describe a recent change in your lifeYou should say: • what the change was• when it happened• how you felt about it• and explain if it was a positive or negative change for you v.1

Describe a recent change in your lifeYou should say: • what the change was• when it happened• how you felt about it• and explain if it was a positive or negative change for you v. 1
It is true to say that some people argue that after school education starts working is good for students while others believe that youngsters should continue their studies and learning skills is much important for them. However, In my opinion, I firmly believe that students should complete their education by university or college then do something better for the future. There are many reasons way students start working after school directly for young people is beneficial such a way of earning more income which, provides their family and basic need. Besides, for searching for jobs and working together as a company they benefit from practical experience and challenging situations. For example, The Sunday Times recently published news that 76% of people in Africa do working straight after school education and they happy with their earning source and freedoms lives. Whatever, some judgment claims that it is not good for early-stage working practice. On the other hand, teaching institutes make students much skilled with vast knowledge. Moreover, nowadays the job market is more competitive. For one post chase thousands of people are applying and only skilled people who have a certificate with the higher study as the same job-related field get success. For instance, In the UK 80% of students got higher-paid posts and excellent facilities who have an educational degree from university or college. In conclusion, considering both views I continue to believe that although money is much important at the early stages to live. Educated, skilled people needed to do something excellent for future nations because schooling makes us more potential and beautiful mind and culture.
It is true to say that
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some
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people
argue that after school education
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starts
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working
is
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good
for
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students
while others believe that youngsters should continue their studies and learning
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skills
is much
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important
for them.
However
, In my opinion, I
firmly
believe that
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students
should complete their education by university or college then do something better for the future.

There are
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many
reasons way
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students
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start
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working
after school
directly
for young
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
is
beneficial such a way of earning more income which, provides their family and basic need.
Besides
, for searching for jobs and
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working
together as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
they benefit from practical experience and challenging situations.
For example
, The Sunday Times recently published news that 76% of
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people
in Africa do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
straight after school
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
education and
they happy with their earning source and freedoms
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lives
. Whatever,
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some
judgment claims that it is not
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good
for early-stage
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working
practice.

On the other hand
, teaching institutes
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make
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students
much skilled with vast knowledge.
Moreover
, nowadays the job market is more competitive. For one post chase thousands of
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people
are applying and
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only
skilled
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people
who have a certificate with the higher study as the same job-related field
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get
success.
For instance
, In the UK 80% of
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students
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got
higher-paid posts and excellent facilities who have an educational degree from university or college.

In conclusion
, considering both views I continue to believe that although money is much
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important
at the early stages to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
. Educated, skilled
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people
needed to do something excellent for future nations
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because
schooling
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makes
us more potential and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
mind and culture.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a recent change in your lifeYou should say: • what the change was• when it happened• how you felt about it• and explain if it was a positive or negative change for you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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