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Describe a person who taught you a certain skill, such as cooking or driving. Please say- Who is that person? - How did he/she teach it to you? - Why did you learn it? - Was this skill useful to you? v.1

Describe a person who taught you a certain skill, such as cooking or driving. Please say- Who is that person? - How did he/she teach it to you? - Why did you learn it? - Was this skill useful to you? v. 1
Popcorn, a cold drink and a thrilling movie. You can get all these things in a cinema, and it seems to be the perfect setting for a first date. However, nowadays we can see films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the cinema. It is questioned whether a movie need to be seen in a cinema, to be fully enjoyed. To begin, cinemas often have a very good sound system. It feels like the play takes place around you. Additionally, the film is normally displayed on a big and high- quality screen. Furthermore, the seats are very comfortable and even provide an aperture where you can leave your refreshment. Secondly, you are normally surrounded by people who love watching films and who are as excited as you are. This creates a special atmosphere. On the other hand, it is not cheap to go to the movie theatre. A ticket costs around ten pounds. For the better felling a cool drink and some popcorn are necessary as well and you end up paying 20 pounds per person. Watching films on our phones or tablets is much cheaper. The monthly price for a Netflix subscription is roughly 10 pounds and you can watch as many films at any time you want. Moreover, you can have a cool sip and some popcorn or nachos at home as well, and it is much cheaper. In conclusion, I think films can be better enjoyed in the cinemas, because of the good sound system, the comfortable seats and special atmosphere.
Popcorn, a
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cold
drink and a thrilling movie. You can
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get
all these things in a
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cinema
, and it seems to be the perfect setting for a
first
date.
However
, nowadays we can
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see
films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
. It
is questioned
whether a movie need to be
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seen
in a
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cinema
, to be
fully
enjoyed.

To
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begin
,
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cinemas
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often
have a
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very
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good
sound system. It feels like the play takes place around you.
Additionally
, the film is
normally
displayed on a
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big
and high- quality screen.
Furthermore
, the seats are
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very
comfortable and even provide an aperture where you can
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leave
your refreshment.

Secondly
, you are
normally
surrounded by
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people
who
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love
watching films and who are as excited as you are. This creates a special atmosphere.

On the other hand
, it is not
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cheap
to go to the movie
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theatre
. A ticket costs around ten pounds. For the better felling a cool drink and
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some
popcorn are necessary
as well
and you
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end
up paying
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20 pounds
per person. Watching films on our phones or tablets is much cheaper. The monthly price for a Netflix subscription is roughly
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
10 pounds
and you can
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watch
as
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many
films at any time you want.

Moreover
, you can have a cool sip and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
popcorn or nachos at home
as well
, and it is much cheaper.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
films can be better enjoyed in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
sound system, the comfortable seats and special atmosphere.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe a person who taught you a certain skill, such as cooking or driving. Please say- Who is that person? - How did he/she teach it to you? - Why did you learn it? - Was this skill useful to you? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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