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Explain the role poverty played in the development of U. S. culture during the “Gilded Age. ” Use details and examples from thelecture to support your explanation. v.1

Explain the role poverty played in the development of U. S. culture during the “Gilded Age. ” Use details and examples from thelecture to support your explanation. v. 1
It has become a worrying trend that in the contemporary era, the offence has inclined significantly in many nations. The essay will highlight what are the reasons behind the happening and what are a few potential measures to resolve it. To start with, there are multifarious aspects, which are responsible to increase the felony. The predominant one is that social media put adverse effects on the person's mind. To explain it, when spectators are watching crime shows on the television, then they prefer to imitate to them. According to a recent survey that a majority of youngsters influence to commit felony by inspiring from their role-models. Furthermore, employment is also responsible for it. To illustrate it, in several countries, most of the people are unemployed owing to it, they are not able to accomplish their daily necessities. Consequently, they follow the path of violation like-robbery, murders and others more. Some solutions can be adopted to improve the situation. The primary remedy is that sensor media should not broadcast the movies and other shows, which are relevant to the violation or the film producers should tell in stating that it is not followed by the individuals as it is just for entertainment. Moreover, the government should provide jobs for all the masses so that they cannot adopt criminal actions in their lives. To add more, higher-authority should organise some programs to manipulate the transgression rate. In conclusion, the essay highlighted that factors behind the occurring are media and scarcity of jobs. The essay also presented that measures to the issue are twofold: controlling the offence related shows and providing jobs to the public.
It has become a worrying trend that in the contemporary era, the
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offence
has inclined
significantly
in
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many
nations. The essay will highlight what are the reasons behind the happening and what are a few potential measures to resolve it.

To
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start
with, there are multifarious aspects, which are responsible to increase the felony. The predominant one is that social media put adverse effects on the person's mind. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
it, when spectators are watching crime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
on the television, then they prefer to imitate to them. According to a recent survey that a majority of youngsters influence to commit felony by inspiring from their role-models.
Furthermore
, employment is
also
responsible for it. To illustrate it, in several countries, most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are unemployed
owing to it, they are not able to accomplish their daily necessities.
Consequently
, they follow the path of violation like-robbery, murders
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
more.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
solutions can
be adopted
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the situation. The primary remedy is that sensor media should not broadcast the movies and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
, which are relevant to the violation or the film producers should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
in stating that it is not followed by the individuals as it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for entertainment.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should provide jobs for all the masses
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they cannot adopt criminal actions in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
more, higher-authority should
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organise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
programs to manipulate the transgression rate.

In conclusion
, the essay highlighted that factors behind the occurring are media and scarcity of jobs. The essay
also
presented that measures to the issue are twofold: controlling the
Possible spelling mistake. 'offence' is British English.
offence
related
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
and providing jobs to the public.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Explain the role poverty played in the development of U. S. culture during the “Gilded Age. ” Use details and examples from thelecture to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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