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Describe a particular TV show that you think is excellent. Include specific details and examples in your answer. v.1

Describe a particular TV show that you think is excellent. Include specific details and examples in your answer. v. 1
In the modern world, many countries are willing to produce food for their nations by themselves, because it is beneficial for them. However, others feel that importing meat products can be a viable option, if the country has no opportunity to grow the crops and other nutrients. There is no denying that if the authorities provide its population with necessary meat products, they can gain confidence to the future. Therefore, it is essential for the country to produce meat products, because in case of trouble they can support their nations with necessary nutrients. A good illustration of this is pandemics. It is widely accepted that the world is suffering from the Coronavirus pandemic at the moment. In this reason, having enough food products is vital in such kinds of situations. However, some people believe that if the country has no possibility to grow the crops, it is the best option for them to import nutrients from abroad. It is true that countries cannot develop all economic sectors. In this regard, if the nation is concentrating on the industry, know how or other sectors of the economy, importing goods can be an effective way to alleviate the lack of food. For example, Japan is famous by its advanced gadgets and innovations. In this reason, they are importing nutrients from foreign countries, because they cannot pay enough attention to the meat industry, because it is not profitable as its innovations. In conclusion, although many people tend to think that importing nourishments can be an effective way, others feel that during the economic hardships, it is critical to support the nation with enough reserves of nutritions. In this regard, many people believe that the second option is the right one.
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because
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importing
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meat
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products
can be a viable option, if the
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country
has no opportunity to grow the crops and
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other
nutrients.

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meat
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products
, they can gain confidence to the future.
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country
to produce
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meat
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products
,
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because
in case of trouble they can support their
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with necessary nutrients. A
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good
illustration of this is pandemics. It is
widely
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accepted
that the world is suffering from the Coronavirus pandemic at the moment. In this reason, having
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enough
food
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products
is vital in such kinds of situations.

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,
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believe that if the
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has no possibility to grow the crops, it is the best option for them to import nutrients from abroad. It is true that
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countries
cannot develop all economic sectors. In this regard, if the
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nation
is concentrating on the industry, know how or
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other
sectors of the economy,
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importing
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goods
can be an effective way to alleviate the lack of food.
For example
, Japan is
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famous
by its advanced gadgets and innovations. In this reason, they are
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importing
nutrients from foreign
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countries
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because
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attention to the
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industry,
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because
it is not profitable as its innovations.

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, although
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people
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be an effective way, others feel that during the economic hardships, it is critical to support the
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nutritions
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IELTS essay Describe a particular TV show that you think is excellent. Include specific details and examples in your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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