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Some universities focus on having excellent libraries, laboratories and other facilities. Others focus on hiring the most successful and qualified professors. Which system do you think benefits students more, and why? Include details and examples in your v.1

Some universities focus on having excellent libraries, laboratories and other facilities. Others focus on hiring the most successful and qualified professors. Which system do you think benefits students more, and why? Include details and examples in your v. 1
Some students prefer to live in university dormitories. However, other students choose to live in apartments in the community. I think both of these options have advantages. In this essay, I will give my reasons to support my view. From the one side, living in a dormitory has many benefits. First of all, for a foreign student, it is a good chance to improve his or her communication skills and find new friends. Second of all, a dormitory has many useful facilities such as libraries, a canteen, Internet access, etc. In addition to these practical benefits living in a dormitory is often cheaper. So, it helps students save some money what is important at the beginning of their independent life. Finally, living in a dormitory gives students the opportunity to ask for help each other if something was not clear on the lecture presented in a class. This, in turn, leads to higher grades. Also, students have many common subject and interests to discuss with each other. So, basically, living in a dormitory helps students to become more sociable and good team-players and gain new knowledge and experience by use of lab, libraries and group discussion. From the other side, living in apartments in the community also have a few benefits. Students can have more privacy and, also, they can choose a community according to its convenience and location. It is sometimes may be an essential because of a person's job. In conclusion, I think that living in a dormitory brings students more benefits than it does living in a community. Students learn to get along with each other, be ready to help and make friends.
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both of these options have advantages. In this essay, I will give my reasons to support my view.

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and find new friends. Second of all, a
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useful facilities such as libraries, a canteen, Internet access, etc.
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common subject and interests to discuss with each
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to become more sociable and
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team-players and gain new knowledge and experience by
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of lab, libraries and group discussion.

From the
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IELTS essay Some universities focus on having excellent libraries, laboratories and other facilities. Others focus on hiring the most successful and qualified professors. Which system do you think benefits students more, and why? Include details and examples in your v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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