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Describe a long journey that you had in your life. Please say- How long was it? - What did you see there? - Did you buy any souvenirs? v.1

Describe a long journey that you had in your life. Please say- How long was it? - What did you see there? - Did you buy any souvenirs? v. 1
In the recent days there are some citizens who say that the foreigners should respect the traditions of the community they are visiting and they should keep the place where they are staying clean. I believe that tourists must act as they are in their homeland. Both reasons will be explained in this essay. To begin with, cultural diversity removed the communication barriers and made the world a global village for celebrations, events and festivals and this encouraged the tourism industry. Thus, foreigners have become everywhere in the country, but any nation has its own customs, beliefs and traditions, which should be respected. This can be witnessed by Saudi Arabia, the traditional women costume of these citizens is Abaya; this piece of cloth must be dressed by any woman who visits this place. This is why foreign people have to respect the rituals and morals of the country. The second reason is that the beaches of the coastal cities have to be clean after the visitors getting back home because the rubbish and the plastic bags may affect the marine animals causing their death; this has a negative impact on the environment. For example, an island near Hawaii has become a great Pacfic Garbage Patch because of the plastic items, bottles and bags that was thrown by the tourist in Hawaii. As a result, tourists have to take care of the land they are standing on. In conclusion, after the essay has shown both reasons, it is important to impose restriction for the visitors of any nation. I adopt the stance that tourist should respect the country's culture and environment.
In the recent days there are
some
citizens who say that the foreigners should respect the traditions of the community they are
visiting and
they should
keep
the place where they are staying clean. I believe that
tourists
must
act as they are in their homeland. Both reasons will be
explained
in this essay.

To
begin
with, cultural diversity removed the communication barriers and made the world a global village for celebrations,
events
and festivals and this encouraged the tourism industry.
Thus
, foreigners have become everywhere in the country,
but
any nation has its
own
customs, beliefs and traditions, which should
be respected
. This can
be witnessed
by Saudi Arabia, the traditional women costume of these citizens is
Abaya
; this piece of cloth
must
be dressed
by any woman who visits this place. This is why foreign
people
have to
respect the rituals and morals of the country.

The second reason is that the beaches of the coastal cities
have to
be clean after the visitors getting back home
because
the rubbish and the plastic bags may affect the marine animals causing their death; this has a
negative
impact on the environment.
For example
, an island near Hawaii has become a great
Pacfic
Garbage Patch
because
of the plastic items, bottles and bags that
was thrown
by the
tourist
in Hawaii.
As a result
,
tourists
have to
take care of the land they are standing on.

In conclusion
, after the essay has shown both reasons, it is
important
to impose restriction for the visitors of any nation. I adopt the stance that
tourist
should respect the country's culture and environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a long journey that you had in your life. Please say- How long was it? - What did you see there? - Did you buy any souvenirs? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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