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Talk about your favourite sport. Please say- What is it? - Explain the rules of this sport. - What clothing and equipment are needed for it? - Why do you like it so much? v.1

Talk about your favourite sport. Please say- What is it? - Explain the rules of this sport. - What clothing and equipment are needed for it? - Why do you like it so much? v. 1
Teaching methodology has great influence on students’ learning experience. Considering the same, some people argue that all the educational institutes focus more on delivering theoretical knowledge instead of promoting practical learning. I completely agree with the notion as many schools and colleges are following the conventional way of learning, with a limited number of practical classes in the weekly timetable. The way of teaching in the majority of the learning organizations is to make students to memorize a bulk of text books. A series of tests are carried out throughout the year, primarily gauging their theoretical learning. That is the reason that students cannot remember the learned concepts and theories for a longer time. Additionally, the pupils do not know how to implement the learned academic knowledge in real life. As we see that a person who has studied physics all his school life does not even know how to repair a basic home circuit. This is the major drawback of our educational system which emphasizes more on memorizing facts and theories, instead of making them understandable with the support of doable examples. In addition to this, the responsibility also lies with the authorities who finalize the curriculum at the institutes. A very few classes are allocated for the practical work of different subjects. To illustrate, usually there are five classes a week for a computer course at school, but only one or two classes are allocated for the related lab work. This allocation does not justify the amount of work that needs to be carried out in labs to better equip with the underlying information. According to a study carried out by education department of Mumbai, India, the students who were taught the lecture along with experimentation better understood and recalled the concepts later on. Thus, a justifiable allocation of both classes is highly needed. To recapitulate, our education system, though yielding bright students, has always focused more on factual learning. However, students' understanding of the subjects can be improved by balancing the routine classes with the practical ones. This strategy will also allow the pupils to better know the implementation of the learned conceptual knowledge.
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people
argue that all the educational institutes focus more on delivering theoretical knowledge
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practical
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learning
. I completely
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agree
with the notion as
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many
schools and colleges are following the conventional way of
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learning
, with a limited number of
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practical
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classes
in the weekly timetable.

The way of teaching in the majority of the
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learning
organizations is to
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make
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students
to memorize a bulk of text books. A series of
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tests
are carried
out throughout the year,
primarily
gauging their theoretical
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learning
.
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the reason that
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students
cannot remember the learned concepts and theories for a longer time.
Additionally
, the pupils do not know how to implement the learned academic knowledge in real life.
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that a person who has studied physics all his school life does not even know how to repair a basic home circuit. This is the major drawback of our educational system which emphasizes more on memorizing facts and theories,
instead
of making them understandable with the support of doable examples.

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to this, the responsibility
also
lies with the authorities who finalize the curriculum at the institutes. A
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very
few
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classes
are allocated
for the
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practical
work of
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different
subjects. To illustrate,
usually
there are five
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classes
a week for a computer course at school,
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but
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only
one or two
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classes
are allocated
for the related lab work. This allocation does not justify the amount of work that needs to
be carried
out in labs to better equip with the underlying information. According to a study carried out by education department of Mumbai, India, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who
were taught
the lecture along with experimentation better understood and recalled the concepts later on.
Thus
, a justifiable allocation of both
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classes
is
highly
needed.

To recapitulate, our education system, though yielding bright
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students
, has always focused more on factual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
.
However
, students' understanding of the subjects can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
by balancing the routine
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classes
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
ones. This strategy will
also
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allow
the pupils to better know the implementation of the learned conceptual knowledge.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about your favourite sport. Please say- What is it? - Explain the rules of this sport. - What clothing and equipment are needed for it? - Why do you like it so much? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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