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Descirbe a journey that you remember well. You should say: where you wenthow you travelledwhy you went on the journeyand explain why you remember this journey well. v.1

Descirbe a journey that you remember well. You should say: where you wenthow you travelledwhy you went on the journeyand explain why you remember this journey well. v. 1
Infrastructure development is a key capital project that can help to develop an economy and enrich the people of the country. Some people are of the opinion that the government should spend more funds on the railways rather than roads and this essay tends to agree with this. Firstly, the rail mode of transportation is very reliable and durable when compared with the road transport system. The rail lines can last up to a century, needing few maintenance works during this period. For example, the track steels that are installed for trains cannot be easily destroyed, heavy, and can't be cut using any type of instrument. By constructing these lines, government will save several millions of money that can be used to develop other sectors where the money will be useful. Secondly, the trains that run on the tracks. By purchasing more trains with several carriages, the number of people taking the trains will increase, thereby reducing the pressure on the expressway and decrease the time it take to get to places. For example, a train with several carriages can carry up to two hundred people, however, with this number, driving in their cars on the highway, there will be traffic jam leading to congestion and delays in getting to destinations. This further strengthens the fact that by having more people using the train, funds can be used for other capital projects such as housing. Thirdly, machines on rail lines are faster and safer than cars on the road. It has been proven that a journey by train is much faster than a journey on the road and this can be particularly useful for the agricultural sector. For example, perishable goods can be easily moved from rural areas to the urban centres for sale in order to ensure they are sold before they become bad. In conclusion, the development of the railways is to the benefit of everyone both economically and health wise. Too much pressure on the highway will lead to increased carbon dioxide levels, leading to respiration problem in humans, however, with the trains the pollution in the air can be significantly reduced.
Infrastructure development is a key capital project that can
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help
to develop an economy and enrich the
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people
of the country.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that the
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government
should spend more funds on the railways
rather
than
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roads
and this essay tends to
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agree
with this.

Firstly
, the rail mode of transportation is
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very
reliable and durable when compared with the
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road
transport system. The rail lines can last up to a century, needing few maintenance works during this period.
For example
, the
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track
steels that
are installed
for
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trains
cannot be
easily
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destroyed
, heavy, and can't be
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cut
using any type of instrument. By constructing these lines,
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government
will save several millions of money that can be
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used
to develop other sectors where the money will be useful.

Secondly
, the
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trains
that run on the
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tracks
. By purchasing more
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trains
with several carriages, the number of
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people
taking the
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trains
will increase, thereby reducing the pressure on the expressway and decrease the time it
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take
to
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get
to places.
For example
, a
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train
with several carriages can carry up to two hundred
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people
,
however
, with this number, driving in their cars on the highway, there will be traffic jam leading to congestion and delays in getting to destinations. This
further
strengthens the fact that by having more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
using the
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train
, funds can be
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used
for other capital projects such as housing.

Thirdly
, machines on rail lines are faster and safer than cars on the
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road
. It has
been proven
that a journey by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
is much faster than a journey on the
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road
and this can be
particularly
useful for the agricultural sector.
For example
, perishable
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goods
can be
easily
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moved
from rural areas to the urban
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centres
for sale in order to ensure they
are sold
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before
they become
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bad
.

In conclusion
, the development of the railways is to the benefit of everyone both
economically
and health wise. Too much pressure on the highway will lead to increased carbon dioxide levels, leading to respiration problem in humans,
however
, with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
the pollution in the air can be
significantly
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reduced
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Descirbe a journey that you remember well. You should say: where you wenthow you travelledwhy you went on the journeyand explain why you remember this journey well. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
355 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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